[quote=@Triesa]


<Snipped quote by Zarkun> Edited, assuming I fixed the thing you were referring to.

<Snipped quote by Zarkun> Are you talking about the point I made in the strength section? Can that not be something I make an example of IC? 

<Snipped quote by Zarkun>That part I left over from my first draft that you saw, true, I shouldn't have left it in. He's not a force user anymore, so I changed it up.








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You mostly fixed it. Just add Rise of the Empire to what he read.