[quote=@Tim]
Added a second paragraph to appearance, describes a bit more about how he moves and such. Do I need to go into more detail?

Fixed the tenses in my writing prompt a bit, too. Sorry about that, I'm just used to a different way of speaking.
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[quote=@Searat]
I've fixed the weaknesses, personality description, and added interaction as suggested. If there is still anything that needs tweaking, please tell me so i could fix it.
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Thanks! I hate to seem so needy. :c I'm just trying to make sure everything is uniform and I have a clear idea of who is like what and what is going on. This is because I take character arcs very seriously, and I want to be inclusive of your characters and not misinterpret anything that might make it an awkward/shitty experience. It has happened before--to a GM friend of mine--and I want to avoid that experience if at all possible.

Also, I'll give this a look over when I do another round of CS checking (and by the looks of it, I may not have anymore) and I may do a preliminary acceptance. I mean, honestly, I wouldn't kick any of these CSes out of bed for eating crackers.