[@JustASelkie] It was good, don't worry =) Maybe if you could edit it so that Evelyn's dialogue is in speech marks? I think you might've just forgotten, although that's just a nitpick. 

 And don't worry about rushing out posts if your busy - this goes for everyone - life happens! So long as if you're going to take longer than a week to post you let people know, then it's fine.