Reviews are in [color=ed1c24]Red[/color]. [hider=Arata] [CENTER][URL=https://youtu.be/YEoE4YNIzsg]Again[/URL] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- [IMG]https://static.zerochan.net/Kuroba.Saneaki.full.1573526.jpg[/IMG][IMG]https://i.imgur.com/b2Nj4ze.jpg[/IMG] [color=ed1c24]you have failed at not making him look gay[/color] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Full Name[/U]】 Arata Kaguya 【[U]Nickname/Alias[/U]】 Ivory Vajra; Maniac [color=ed1c24]lolwut[/color] 【[U]Gender[/U]】 Male 【[U]Age[/U]】 25 【[U]Age Appearance[/U]】 Early Twenties 【[U]Sexuality[/U]】 Demisexual, Heteromantic [color=ed1c24]kiss my ass you tumblr shit. considering this either fake-asexual or straight.[/color] 【[U]Nation[/U]】 Amekagure 【[U]Birthplace[/U]】 [S]The New Continent[/S]. As far as officials from other nations are concerned, he was born in Kirigakure no Sato. [color=ed1c24]woowee same as yogensha[/color] 【[U]Alignment/Affiliation/Organization[/U]】 ~~ [color=ed1c24]ah yes the ~~ squad, i should've known[/color] 【[U]Clan/Bloodline[/U]】 Kaguya 【[U]Rank[/U]】 Jounin 【[U]Chakra Nature[/U]】 Lightning; Water 【[U]Appearance/Wardrobe[/U]】 Arata is a somehow delicate looking young man [color=ed1c24]three too many words to say 'gay'[/color], having an overall lean build, average height (174 cm/5'8½"), abnormally pale complexion and fair, feminine looks that can only be described as beautiful rather than handsome when complemented by his long white hair - usually wore in a way that clearly denotes care, with his bangs - that can easily reach his his nose at their longest - fall orderly over his forehead to avoid being bothered by it during fights and tying his hair in a single ponytail in the back and two long bangs in the side of his head - to produce the image of a young man lacking any visible tarnish that could possibly denote having ever faced harshness during his whole life, almost like the pampered child of a rich traditional family... At least in the surface. [color=ed1c24]do you realize this was one big sentence?[/color] If someone truly paid attention to him [color=ed1c24]had not to with this flamboyancy[/color], though, they'd quic[color=ed1c24]k[/color]ly notice that truth hidden under his loose clothes is clearly different from the overall fragile feel that he gives, as in despite seemingly delicate appearance, he not only has quite muscular physique but also seems to be heavily marred with scars, mostly results of his heavy training and past fights as a Shinobi. [color=ed1c24]doesn't his kg give him some weird kind of healing to minor wounds at least? oh well[/color] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Personality[/U]】 Being abandoned and thrown in a far away continent before he even had his fifth birthday and forced to live amongst people who only kept him for his potential as a tool to earn more profit, it isn't surprising that Arata grew up to be an highly individualist person with a tendency of automatically distrusting those around him e effectively trying to avoid getting close to people, being well known amongst his associates for having the kind of attitude that automatically makes one think that the whole world and everyone inside it displeases him, not ony openly ignoring people but - when finally forced to reply due to the sheer insistence of the other party - talking informally to everyone independently of their position and being purposefully blunt or cold in his replies and statements for the sole purpose of keeping others away from himself. [color=ed1c24]another huge-ass sentence. also loner boi that wears trench coats right[/color] He obviously does not trust others easily and seems to be uncomfortable with the idea of becoming closer to other people, supposedly valuing his own safety above anything else and only doing things either for the sake fulfilling his own needs, finishing the mission assigned to him or following his urge to become a stronger Shinobi independently of the price, being an individula that will seemingly not even think twice before sacrificing others for the sake of either the successful completion of his mission or a chance of becoming stronger. [color=ed1c24]edgy[/color] With that being said, it isn't wrong to say that - in despite [color=ed1c24]spite[/color] of the his usual attitude - Arata is ultimately away softer in the inside tha[color=ed1c24]n[/color] his sister, not only having a soft spot for children and loathing the idea of hurting those who can't defend themselves but - In complete opposition to his ancestors - effectively hating killing and trying to avoid it as much as possible, though that's hardly that easy when considering his position, and legitmaly agonizing over the difficult decisions he had to take in the course of his missions to avoid failure in despite of how he doesn't falter even for a second before taking them. [color=ed1c24]what a baby[/color] In the end, even if he keeps a tough facade and hides his emotions even from himself, Arata actually does care [color=ed1c24]you blew it[/color] for the people around him but is away too scared of effectively recognizing that and forming bonds to openly show it, fearing abandonment to the point that even his overwhelming need for strength is a direct result of him wanting so much to keep himself from being left behind that he effectively strives to be strong enough for others to feel the need to depend on him.[color=ed1c24]still no full-edge char darnit[/color] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]History[/U]】 Like his sister, Arata was born in a faraway land, far from the everlasting conflict that cursed the Shinobi since the times when chakra was first used for the purpose of killing - a beautiful place devoid of any chaos where they could be truly free... Or so he was told by his sister, for on the opposite of Yogensha he was never even given the chance of creating any fond memories of his homeland. [color=ed1c24]hahahahahaha[/color] On the opposite of his older sister, he was merely two when his parents merciles[color=ed1c24]s[/color]ly decided to send eastwards with a clan of traveling merchants with no one but his slightly older sibling to call family, passed off by his parents like they were.. dead weight - something that his sister came to describe as natural - like a bird throwing their young out the nest, this was their parents way of saying 'grow up'. [color=ed1c24]thank you period[/color] On the opposite of his sister, that immediately reacted with all her forces from the first moment as they where forced into an unwanted journey to Sunagakure, the young and innocent took away longer to understand the situation and never quite understood or forgave their decisions: It didn't matter for him that it was the only way they knew or anything of the genre, the only thing that mattered was that they abandoned him before he even knew their face, and he could never bring himself to understand that. Even the journey would become naught but an immense blur in Arata's memory with time, as he could barely recall anything from its start and only vaguely remembered something about how... Weird Sunagakur[color=ed1c24]e[/color] was when compared to what he previously knew. From the very start, it didn't even matter for him where they were going to or what they were going to to: He was more than satisfied with just following his sister's decisions and follow her through her wanderings, trekking through the desert together to find and explore new lands. It was only natural for him to do so since he never even had the opportunity to grow up sheltered for enough time to develop his own drivings on the opposite of his sister. In the end, his sole certainty was that as long as he followed the only family he ever knew. Ultimately, he was far from being right: During their travels the two Kaguya siblings would be ultimately picked up by Kirigakure operatives who had been sent out to collect the two presumed orphans. It was originally a simple retrieval mission to take two kids off the road and into an orphanage but quickly became more when it was evident the two came from the dark continent: from then onwards, they'd stopped being possible assets and effectively became actual tools that could lead to a whole new era of profit. [color=ed1c24]$$$$[/color] It took years [color=ed1c24]mind readers, anyone? nope? guess it's years of labour then[/color] of investigation for them to realize that a kid as young as him couldn't possibly know anything important about the new continent, and everything they gave in return for these years of interrogation was the privilege to be kept as a pet hidden under the guise of special privileges, treated as something of a guest of honour at times, an exotic animal to be shown off at other times and ultimately naught but slaves to the will of some powerful official. It wa[color=ed1c24]s[/color] only after his sister entered service for the Chūsei Kokoro Hoji-sha and Arata started to demonstrate not only an abnormal potential in both Ninjutsu and Taijutsu but also a high affinity to his clan's kekkei genkai that the siblings effectively started to hold enough influence to keep a stable position without having to depend on anyone to keep themselves alive and well and even that could do nothing but reinforce Arata's singular belief that only by becoming more powerful than anyone else he could hope to be free and happy like his sister once described in their childhood, driving him into searching strength in any way possible even at the cost of his own life and ultimately leading him to his actual situation as one of the members of the expedition to the new continent. [color=ed1c24]so when did he go to ame[/color] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Special Traits[/U]】 Kaguya Physiology - As a Kaguya, Arata not only has bones that are absurdly more durable than normal person's - to the point of being considered as nigh invulnerable - but also seen regenerate in a superhuman speed [color=ed1c24]unless you have an ability for it you're not getting a /actual/ heal on top of top tier taijutsu and elemental ninjutsu[/color], being mostly unmatched when it comes to survivability alone. He also seems to be highly resistant to poisons and drugs as a whole due to his unique constitution. [color=ed1c24]random resistance but w/e[/color] Abnormal Physical Might - Being being mostly focused on taijutsu and wholeheartedly dedicated to improving himself, Arata naturally has a boderline superhuman physical might in despite of his deceptively lean appearance. [color=ed1c24]so much for relying of unique taijutsu and physiology[/color] Capable Swordsman - While he isn't truly as specialized at wielding a sword as most believe, Arata is still classified as an moderately skilled swordsman due to his insistence in training swordsmanship as a way to keeps his kekkei genkai as a secret. Taijutsu Expert - While not comparable to more illustrious members of his lineage in the past, Arata is undoubtedly a qualified taijutsu user in his own right. Lightning Release Expert - In despite of living in the Hidden Mist Village and being capable of using Water Release, Arata's obsession with becoming stronger directly made him opt to concentrate his studies on Lightning Release - a nature much more directly suited for combat in his personal opinion. 【[U]Afflictions/Nerfs[/U]】 N/A -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Equipment/Weapons/Items[/U]】 [I] [U][b]Name of Weapon or Item:[/b][/u] Kokuto [U][B]Description:[/B][/U] A [Url=http://i40.tinypic.com/2hyj72d.jpg]black colored ninjato[/url] easily recognizable for the specially tempered blade that has a darkened, non-reflective surface and is normally heavily coated in poison.[/I] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Kekkei Genkai[/U]】 [I][U]Name of Kekkei Genkai:[/U][/I] Shikotsumyaku [I][U]Clan:[/U][/I] Kaguya [I][U]Description:[/U][/I] As a heir of the Kaguya clan, Arata not only inherited the Shikotsumyaku Kekkei Genkai but also demonstrated being what one would call as a genius in using his clan's Kekkei Genkai, being extremely talented when it comes instinctively using their techniques but lacking the instruction needed to completely master his clan's style - to the point where even now, when he's already considered a full-fledged shinobi, he is still unable to use all of his clans dances efficiently, having "merely" mastered the first three dances inherited from his ancestors and started to develop his own variations of those techniques. ------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Jutsu[/U]】[/CENTER] [hider=Canon Jutsu] Water: [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Heavenly_Weeping]Heavenly Weeping[/URL] [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Hiding_in_Mist_Technique]Hiding in Mist Technique[/URL] [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Water_Release:_Hiding_in_Water_Technique]Hiding in Water Technique[/URL] [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Thousand_Flying_Water_Needles_of_Death]Thousand Flying Water Needles of Death[/URL] [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Water_Prison_Technique]Water Prison Technique[/URL] Lightning: [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Lightning_Release:_Electromagnetic_Murder]Electromagnetic Murder[/URL] [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Lightning_Strike_Armour]Lightning Strike Armour[/URL] [color=ed1c24]idk looks v gay and very strong on an already ridiculously strong taijutsu user but ok[/color] [Url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Lightning_Release:_Purple_Electricity]Purple Electricity[/Url] [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Lightning_Release:_Spider_Web]Spider Web[/URL] [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Lightning_Release:_Thunder_Binding]Thunder Binding[/URL] Bone: [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Dance_of_the_Camellia]Dance of the Camellia[/URL] [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Dance_of_the_Larch]Dance of the Larch[/URL] [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Dance_of_the_Willow]Dance of the Willow[/URL] [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Ten-Finger_Drilling_Bullets]Ten-Finger Drilling Bullets[/URL] Other: [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Chakra_Flow]Chakra Flow[/URL] [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Execution_by_Kiss]Execution by Kiss [/URL] (Without Techniques/Elemental Nature absorption) [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Silent_Killing]Silent Killing[/URL] [/hider] [hider=Custom Jutsu (WiP)] [B]Name of Technique:[/B] Blooming Seedlings [B]Type of Jutsu:[/B] Ninjutsu [B]Rank:[/B] B [B]Range:[/B] Varied/All ranges [B]Nature Type:[/B] N/A [B]Description:[/B] A technique similar in nature to the dance of seedling fern, this unique application of bone release revolves around planting bone fragments all around the field while moving around, leaving them behind as traps that "bloom" into fully grown bone spikes similar to those manifested by the dance of the seedling fern either when someone steps over them or triggered by a lightning release jutsu. Can be used as a conductor for lightning release techniques. [B]Name of Technique:[/B] Certain Kill: Descent of the Heavenly Tribulation [B]Type of Jutsu: [/B] Ninjutsu [B]Rank: [/B] B-S (Depending on the quantity of pillars) [color=ed1c24]i hate these forks. it's S rank then. which means tone down its potential. you can usually regulate the power of your jutsu, which would make most jutsu eligible for this weird fork. A rank max.[/color] [B]Range: [/B] Medium [B]Nature Type: [/B] Lightning [B]Description: [/B] A conjunct technique used exclusively with the aid of the Blooming Seedlings Technique, this technique consists in - after triggering either 4, 12, or 24 spikes originated from the Blooming Seedlings technique - using the lightning release chakra contained inside Arata's bone spikes to create an effect similar to that of a small scale version of [URL=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Limelight]Limelight[/URL]: A lightning dome that mercilessly targets anyone unlucky enough to be inside the affected area. The power of this technique is directly proportional to the number of spikes utilized, with one being generated by a 24 spikes - the maximum number, considerably above Arata's current limit of 12 - being comparable to the likes of Kirin or Limelight in sheer intensity (though targeting a considerably smaller area). [color=ed1c24]i guess that's fine. Kirin is actually somewhat precise but then leaves a big kaboom. just a big bolt of lightning befalling one specific spot.[/color] [/hider] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- [color=ed1c24]alright char, watch the punctuation jesus christ. unsure how he is from ame if he's from kiri but also new continent in actuality. jutsu are okay but never sure given how powergamey shikotsumiyaku is in physical combat. as in, people quote the wiki saying its the strongest taijutsu form or whatever. it's not. it was in pre-shippuden yes. but shippuden changed the whole game. keep that in mind. also you've stretched your arsenal to elements, some pretty useful. that also balances it out. and no healing for u except for mild injuries for fluff and to fix your gore KG. approved[/color] [/hider] [hr] [hider= Miyu Tachibana] [center][I]Character Theme -[/I] [URL=https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XgquSZy9hHg]Kasabian Fire[/URL] [color=ed1c24]doesnt work[/color] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- [img]http://safebooru.org//images/1939/87b1a6c1d308651a4fa770c53f26d4eeca36538b.jpg?2020915[/img] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Full Name[/U]】 Miyu Tachibana 【[U]Nickname/Alias[/U]】 The Pharmacist 【[U]Gender[/U]】 Female 【[U]Age[/U]】 17 [color=ed1c24]fuckin baby[/color] 【[U]Age Appearance[/U]】 17 【[U]Sexuality[/U]】 Tree Sexual [color=ed1c24]no[/color] 【[U]Nation[/U]】 Hidden [color=ed1c24]sure buddi[/color] 【[U]Birthplace[/U]】 Isles of Mist 【[U]Alignment/Affiliation/Organization[/U]】 Isles of Mist 【[U]Clan/Bloodline[/U]】 N/A 【[U]Rank[/U]】 Low Jonin 【[U]Chakra Nature[/U]】 N/A 【[U]Appearance/Wardrobe[/U]】 Miyu wears white robes that easily covers her body, and can extend a hood to completely cover her if need be. Throughout the clothing, Miyu has hidden pockets upon hidden pockets, where her numerous items are hidden. Miyu is rather short, and has her hair in a ponytail near constantly. Her shoes are worn, as is the robes she wears. There is a patchwork through both. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Personality[/U]】 Never one to rush, and always full of confidence, Miyu has the air of someone who can't fail around her. She might rarely jump to any conclusion, but when she arrives, she does so with such resolve that it tends to make her seem like she knows what she's doing. Miyu's secret is to always work smarter, and not harder. She doesn't give up, but spends alot of time in self reflection. She wants her confidence to be contagious, and tries to uplift people around her. If someone expresses a dream, Miyu treats it as a fact. If someone is failing at something, Miyu will tell them to keep going. Miyu, however, isn't perfect. She tends to become overly focused on a task, and refuses to give up on it. It gets worse if she's ordered to change tracks, because she'll become overly obsessed with whatever she has failed at. The less focused Miyu becomes, the less effective she is as well. She works best like clockwork, sticking to a schedule, and managing things one thing at a time. Don't let her reset either, because she does not know how to relax. [color=ed1c24]hate it when that happens[/color] Miyu also holds on hell of a grudge. She still remembers every single person who has ever told her she couldn't. She makes it a point to screw them over when at all possible, even if they've forgotten about her. [color=ed1c24]lil shit[/color] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]History[/U]】 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- There are some people who were born adept geniuses at being a ninja. Miyu wasn't one of them. Throughout the academy, she never learned a single jutsu, despite years and years of trying. She had a large amount of chakra, but she could never control it for anything. Her taijutsu was awkward, and to improvised to learn any official technique there either. There we[color=ed1c24]re[/color] other people like her. Talentless runts who through sheer force of will became monsters. Miyu wasn't one of them, either. She cried, alot, and didn't feel like she was progressing. She was kicked out of the academy in the end. [color=ed1c24]cyberbully 2: wannabe sageroo. also nardo version[/color] Still, Miyu came from the poorer parts of the Isle of Mist, and being a successful ninja was the best way to drag her family into the main city. Everything about Miyu rested on becoming a ninja. Coming from the slums, however, did have some benefits. Such as the fact officially, Miyu didn't exist. She forged documents [color=ed1c24]'thats illegal you know'[/color], and managed to land in with a team, who assumed she came from a different academy. She was afraid out of her mind it would go poorly, and read everything on being a shinobi she could. Miyu had to learn, and she had to learn quickly. She was weaker than any of her teammates, and with the chunnin exams, no one expected her to end up doing well. Miyu fought dirty, and began to use items specifically to counter others [color=ed1c24]not all that believable but ill let this pass[/color]. She ended up with first place. She couldn't win a single fight normally, but one by one she managed to trick her opponents, and exploited their weaknesses. A dojutsu user hated the light. A Earth Spear user reacted badly to poison. A speed demon fell to a mine. A medic nin was outlasted. The fact she'd manage to find their files before hand helped as well. People above her were angry. There were well placed bets in the chunnin exams, and she was ruining the betting business for all of them. They demanded she not be given the rank of chunnin. So she wasn't that year. Quietly her sensei convinced the Mizukage to give her the rank during a lull period. [color=ed1c24]more bribing i see ........[/color] Still, people haven't forgotten Miyu, and the fact she's succeeded despite having no talent, and coming from the slums have made those feelings worse. She was chosen as one to explore the new continent mainly to get her out of the Isles. [color=ed1c24]she'll be hokage soon i know it[/color] Miyu's secretly a bit afraid of the mission, but is coming at it with the same diligence she's always shown. Grabbing as many books as she could, Miyu has studied hard trying to find something other than items she could use. One thing that has surprised her has been as she has quietly meditated, she has become aware of another energy. She hasn't learned much about it yet, and it has been dangerous so far to learn more, but Miyu's begun to learn the art of the sage. [color=ed1c24]talentless. goes against all odds with creative measures. wants to be a sage. reminds me of someone ..... must be sakura, 'cause she talentless and a woman!!!!!!!!![/color] 【[U]Special Traits[/U]】 Talented physically. Incredibly intelligent. Fast. Extreme Stamina. Beginning to access Senjutsu. (Has one use for it) [color=ed1c24]u'll need more than that small para of history for any sort of meaningful progress. admittedly, less exposition is fine. but sage mode is pretty unique. ill let one slide for now.[/color] 【[U]Afflictions/Nerfs[/U]】 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Equipment/Weapons/Items[/U]】 [hider=Equipment(There's alot)] [i] [u]Name of Weapon or Item:[/u] Ruyi Bang [u]Description:[/u] A staff of hardened wood durable enough to survive being cut with a chakra enhanced blade. It is Miyu's primary weapon. [u]Appearance:[/u] A golden tipped staff made of a special type of mahogany. [u]Name of Weapon or Item:[/u] Stamina pills [u]Description:[/u] Pills that quickly recover the user's stamina within a few minutes, allowing them to keep going. Requires alot of food however. That, or the user becomes starving instantly. [color=ed1c24]you already have godly stamina. guess its useful for teammates. quantity depends on EM's verdict.[/color] [u]Appearance:[/u] They appear as simple green pills in a bottle. [u]Name of Weapon or Item:[/u] Baccus's wine [u]Description:[/u] A wine in a bottle that sends the partaker into a blind rage. The user doesn't feel pain during this time, and their strength is doubled. However, they can't think clearly, and calming them down is a problem. [color=ed1c24]duration is important here. up to EM as well, or your agreement with the opponent.[/color] [u]Appearance:[/u] They appear as simple green pills in a bottle. [u]Name of Weapon or Item:[/u] Dried Angel's tears [u]Description:[/u] Pills that when consumed causes yang chakra in a person to overload and for the body to start healing itself at an enhanced rate. However, they prevent a user from actually molding chakra for a significant time, and too much physical strain will hurt the body. Still, they can patch up most minor injuries in a matter of a minute, and major injuries in a few days. As long as they are working, the consumer glows blue as the chakra is visible. [color=ed1c24]cute. includes sage art in chakra usage. gotta think long term. i like this pill though.[/color] [u]Appearance:[/u] They appear as simple blue pills in a bottle. [u]Name of Weapon or Item:[/u]Standing World Mushroom [u]Description:[/u] A mushroom filled to the brim with stimulants. When taken, it heightens the users perception, boosting their adrenaline. It lasts half an hour, then gives the user a headache. During this time, the user has the perception skills comparable to the sharingan, minus the chakra sight. [color=ed1c24]so a free sharingan without copying and chakra sight. if you /ever/ get sage mode, this won't stack with the super tier reflexes and sensory. otherwise it's ok[/color] [u]Appearance:[/u] A mushroom the color of coffee. [u]Name of Weapon or Item:[/u] 1 Up Mushroom [u]Description:[/u] A fungus the user ties to their body, Miyu keeps it in her hair like a flower. It feeds off the users chakra, storing up a large amount. When eaten, it restores the users chakra using the weeks worth stored, much like the [url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Strength_of_a_Hundred_Seal]Strength of a Hundred Seal[/url], and has a healing factor on the whole body. Miyu only has one at a time, as they take weeks to grow. It is Miyu's ultimate item. [color=ed1c24]im thinking long term with your character rather than the now. right now this if actually fine. i fear more when you start getting sage mode. even if one time use, it may not be that relevant if skips between arcs are longer than the cultivation time. it's fine for now, though.[/color] [u]Appearance:[/u] It is a green mushroom. [u]Name of Weapon or Item:[/u] Basilisk Fangs [u]Description:[/u] A grenade filled with a poison smoke bomb. When it goes off, a sudden purple cloud forms, that is filled with poison that targets the lungs. She carries antidotes for this as well. [color=ed1c24]what does the poison do. quantities. all that junk. you of all people know how much i hate balancing poison.[/color] [u]Appearance:[/u] Just a grenade. Antidote is red pills. [u]Name of Weapon or Item:[/u] Basilisk Stare [u]Description:[/u] It appears from a distance to be an explosive tag, but when detonated, a magnesium flare goes off. It is blinding to most, but to those with a dojutsu, its damage is much more severe. [color=ed1c24]flash bomb, ok[/color] [u]Appearance:[/u] It looks like an explosive tag, but has different writing [u]Name of Weapon or Item:[/u] Cluster Explosive Tag [u]Description:[/u] An tag that summons a cluster of 20 explosive tags that all go off at once. [color=ed1c24]hi my name is tobirama i will be hashirama sage today. cant spawn more cluster explosives with this effect as to avoid that crazy jutsu. still seems a bit strong as twenty tags is quite the ridiculous attack but it's w/e.[/color] [u]Appearance:[/u] Looks like an explosive tag with more writing. [u]Name of Weapon or Item:[/u] Landmine [u]Description:[/u] Just a proxity landmine slightly more powerful than an explosive tag, filled with shrapnel that Miyu can attach to surfaces. It goes off if any large object moves within 10 feet of it. [color=ed1c24]sure, if you have good spatial definition.[/color] [u]Appearance:[/u] Looks like a circular disk. [/I] [/hider] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Kekkei Genkai [/U]】 N/A ------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Jutsu[/U]】[/center] N/A [hider=Canon Jutsu] - [/hider] [hider=Custom Jutsu] [color=ed1c24]why did you do this[/color] [hider=Custom Jutsu] [b]Name of Technique:[/b] Senjutsu: Restoration [b]Type of Jutsu:[/b] Senjutsu [b]Rank:[/b] B [b]Range:[/b] Self [b]Nature Type:[/b] N/A [b]Description:[/b] The only jutsu Miyu has ever had any luck in. When she is injured, Miyu is able to draw natural energy into herself just long enough to start to heal from minor to moderate wounds. She has to be absolutely still for this to take effect, so often she'll play possum in the middle of a battlefield, only to come back to full energy moments later. [color=ed1c24]that's three mediums to heal yourself (and not others unless you lend a pill). again this isn't a big deal now. i am more concerned with how an imperfect, and even a perfect, sage would operate with this much recovery and stamina. for now its fine, but expect some limitations when you actually got swole.[/color] [/hider] [/hider] [color=ed1c24]the concept is interesting and leaves room for development. this is good. there may need to be changes as she actually gets strong as her current set-up is mostly designed for a weaker character. usually that'd be fine, but when sage mode is added to the mix, even on a weak as shit character, it's a whole different ball game. you know this. Character is approved, i dont expect you to be a shitter. feel free to post in the cs bin.[/color] [/hider] [hr] [hider=Uragiri Kinzo] [center][I]Character Theme -[/I] [URL=https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2e-k1xLG1sA]You Can’t Fight Lightning[/URL] [color=ed1c24]music is banned in my country. try again[/color] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- [img]https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/311098530834153484/438121445500125195/oc__happy_birthday__bluejay_by_zweihander_k-d9dvkoe.jpg[/img] [color=ed1c24]edo tensei is banned, again[/color] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Full Name[/U]】 Uragiri [s]Kinzo[/s] [color=ed1c24]Sakana 2[/color] 【[U]Nickname/Alias[/U]】 N/A 【[U]Gender[/U]】 Male 【[U]Age[/U]】 18 [color=ed1c24]more fucking kids[/color] 【[U]Age Appearance[/U]】 Early 20’s 【[U]Sexuality[/U]】 Heterosexual [color=ed1c24]insert unfunny homosexuality reference[/color] 【[U]Nation[/U]】 Rajin Dynasties 【[U]Birthplace[/U]】 Rajin Dynasties 【[U]Alignment/Affiliation/Organization[/U]】 Rajin Dynasties [color=ed1c24]Calimari[/color] Tribe 【[U]Clan/Bloodline[/U]】 Uragiri Clan 【[U]Rank[/U]】 Chunnin 【[U]Chakra Nature[/U]】 Primary: Lightning 【[U]Appearance/Wardrobe[/U]】 Kinzo wears the regular garb of a Kaminari Tribe Shinobi, preferring to wear light clothing beneath his flak jacket. He has never particularly cared for what colors his clothing is, though he tends to stay within the blue spectrum as they are readily available. He leaves his hands completely bare, sacrificing a potential boost to grip strength and some protection in favor of preventing a potential decrease in handseal speed. Like other members of his clan he does his best to make sure he is always presentable, keeping his hair washed and well groomed, ensuring that his clothes are in good shape, etc. While he has strayed from many aspects of the clan he still takes pride in the state of his appearance. The most obvious characteristic is yet another that he shares with his clan, that being his black eyes. Unlike most differently colored eyes his are not due to a doujutsu, just a simple quirk of genetics. [color=ed1c24]this just in, scientists have found a way to genetically transmit edge. more at 11[/color] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Personality[/U]】 [b]An Obedient Soldier[/b] [color=ed1c24]thank you savato for this theme[/color] Kinzo believes strongly in the chain of command and he follows orders as close to the letter as physically possible. If required he would place the success of his mission/completion of his orders above his own survival. [color=ed1c24]gotta respect the ooga booga dynasty[/color] [b]Loyal Comrade[/b] He is incredibly loyal to those he fights beside, doing everything he can to ensure their survival. Given that he is primarily a mid to long range combatant he rarely will leap in front of an attack, simply because he is too far to do so, but he will use his range to protect from a distance. [b]Off Duty Compartmentalization[/b] While he is able to follow orders without hesitation when he has downtime he lets himself relax, push all of the things he has to do while on duty to the back of his mind. He is just another bloke, drinking with his comrades, shooting the breeze, etc. [b]Hard Worker[/b] Kinzo has never been a prodigy, but due to dedicating himself to his training he has dragged himself above the averageness that plagues his clan. It was never his intent to become more than bland [color=ed1c24]summation of his character right there[/color], he just enjoyed training. It felt good to watch his abilities improve. [b]Nice but Regular[/b] Far from a fly on the wall, Kinzo does fall short of being the life of the party. He is nice enough, but he isn’t super charming or lively. It’s nice to have him around, but he isn’t the first person you’d ask to a party and certainly wouldn’t throw one himself. [color=ed1c24]norman mcaverage basically[/color] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]History[/U]】 For a good chunk of his life, Kinzo was just another member of the Uragiri clan. Sure he stood out a little because he was stronger than average due to the additional time spent training, but overall he was just another bland member of a bland clan. He joined the ranks of the shinobi serving the Kaminari Tribe at a typical age. After joining his first squad he continued to just be an Uragiri. It wasn’t until he had attained the rank of Chunnin that he began to separate away from his clan. Even then it wasn’t an immediate or quick transition. For the first year of being Chunnin things progressed as normal. One day however he was placed on a squad lead by the current chief’s heir as well as a couple of others. It was a routine mission and everything went according to plan. They accomplished their goal and were beginning the trek back. That is when things headed south rapidly. They had only made it a quarter of the way back when they were ambushed by a group of ninja from one of the other tribes. The formation Kinzo’s squad had been traveling in had him positioned in the back and a distance away from the other three, they were close range specialists while he excelled at mid to long range. His squad was doing an admirable job at defending themselves for the first portion of the fight. However they were outnumbered and steadily were getting pushed back. With the enemy shinobi grouping up, they presented a perfect target for Kinzo. Using his Lightning Violent Rat Quake he quickly helped turned the tide of the fight back in his squads favor. Each disk hit its intended target, some managing to outright kill while those that weren’t fatal still managed to disoritent the combatants enough for his team to land killing blows. [color=ed1c24]mr mvp vs the generic evil shinobi duders!!!![/color] The rest of the journey progressed without issue and upon the squad leader, the heir, delivering his report Kinzo received a summon to speak with the Kaminari himself. When he appeared before the tribal leader he was not the only one there, as one of the other members of his squad was present. They both were informed that they would be receiving the knowledge of how to use Black Lightning for their service to the tribe. [color=ed1c24]they need a whole council to learn this fluff shit holy crap no wonder they lost the war[/color] Receiving the Black Lightning signified the start of Kinzo branching away from the rest of his clan [color=ed1c24]ungrateful shit[/color]. When the Kaminari Tribe as a whole had learned about him acquiring the Black Lightning technique they began to integrate him more. He began taking on more missions against the other tribes directly, supporting his comrades. As he spent time with them he pulled away from the Unagiri’s belief system and adopted a belief in the Rajin. While he was regarded as a bit strange among his clan, they didn’t ignore him or look down on him. He was just different. Two years have passed since then, and in that time things have remained relatively the same. Kinzo, along with a few other members of the tribe, have been sent to Amegakure though the exact reason why was not fully explained. [color=ed1c24]probably to discuss bean trade[/color] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Special Traits[/U]】 -Average chakra capacity -Refined chakra control -Mid to Long range specialist -Skilled in Ninjutsu -Accurate with Ninja Tools (Kunai, Shuriken) 【[U]Afflictions/Nerfs[/U]】 -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Equipment/Weapons/Items[/U]】 [i] Typical shinobi tools [/I] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Kekkei Genkai [/U]】 N/A ------------------------------------------------------- 【[U]Jutsu[/U]】[/center] [hider=Canon Jutsu] Note: All canon jutsu are a Black Lightning variant A Rank: B Rank: [url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Lightning_Release:_Electromagnetic_Murder]Lightning Release: Electromagnetic Murder[/url] [url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Lightning_Release:_False_Darkness]Lighning Release: False Darkness[/url] C Rank: [url=http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Lightning_Rat_Violent_Quake]Lightning Rat Violent Quake[/url] D Rank:[/hider] [hider=Custom Jutsu] [b]Name of Technique:[/b] Black Lightning [b]Type of Jutsu:[/b] Supplementary/offensive [b]Rank:[/b] D [b]Range:[/b] All Ranges [b]Nature Type:[/b] Lightning [b]Description:[/b] This technique is used exclusively by the members of the Kaminari Tribe. The knowledge of how to perform it is given to those who have done a great service to the tribe. While the technique is completely cosmetic in nature, simply making it so the user capable of changing the color of their lightning from blue to black, its purpose is to be used as a type of badge of [color=ed1c24]edge[/color] [b]Name of Technique:[/b] Lightning Release- Perpetual Black Lightning Strikes [b]Type of Jutsu:[/b] Ninjutsu [b]Rank:[/b] A [b]Range:[/b] Mid to Long [b]Nature Type:[/b] Lightning [b]Description:[/b] After the user completes the handseals black lightning bolts begin striking the designated area repeatedly. Besides choosing the general area of the strikes the user has no control over the lightning, which means it is dangerous to friend and foe alike if they are in the area. The technique is restricted to a 25m diameter circle. This technique is chakra intensive, if Kinzo plans on continuing to fight he can only use it once in a battle. Additionally concentration is required to keep the jutsu going, so it can be ended prematurely if he is forced to lose focus. [color=ed1c24]so basically some danger zone. hmmm, bit weird for an A rank because of its random nature. not denied or anything but chances are you opponent will just /always/ dodge or stay away.[/color] [b]Name of Technique:[/b] Lightning Release- Black Current Kunai/Shuriken [b]Type of Jutsu:[/b] Supplementary [b]Rank:[/b] C [b]Range:[/b] Mid to Long [b]Nature Type:[/b] Lightning [b]Description:[/b] By channeling his chakra into a kunai or shuriken he is able to coat them in a layer of Black Lightning. This acts as a regular Lightning chakra enhanced weapon would, increasing the piercing effect of the associated weapon and causing numbness where they hit. The numbness lasts briefly if the weapon only grazes the target or pierces through them, however if the weapon is embedded into the target the numbness will last until it is removed and for a short time after depending on how long it was lodged inside of them. [/hider] -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- [color=ed1c24]literally nothing wrong here. if you want to tweak a few things, such as the A rank to make it a bit more consistent, go ahead. char is approved, just run it by me in PM's if you want to change something.[/color] [/hider]