[quote=@NightmareInd] The first character is here! Let's see if you guys like it! [hider=Peter van Houten AKA SpeedyMonkey AKA KingOP] [CENTER] [h3]Peter van Houten[/h3] [img]https://i.pinimg.com/originals/33/e3/44/33e344d3f015f4f735fbfbfc7e348b1d.jpg[/img][/CENTER] [hr] [b][u]AGE:[/u][/b] 19 [b][u]APPEARANCE:[/u][/b] Peter is about 1.80 m (around 5'90") tall, and a bit skinny. He has light brown hair and dark green eyes. He is usually found wearing his signature green hoodie over a dark grey shirt and dark blue jeans along with red comfy sneakers. [b][u]PERSONALITY:[/u][/b] When he is not gaming, Peter is a kind but shy kind of guy. He barely goes outside for anything other than school and chores. He feels pretty insecure about himself because he feels like he isn't good at much. This changes when he is in Haven Online. He gets confident, brave and even a bit cocky. He almost feels like he can own the world, even if it is a virtual one. [b][u]BACKGROUND:[/u][/b] Peter was born and raised in the Netherlands. At young age he already noticed that he didn't know what his destiny would be. Even on short term, nobody had even an idea what future had in store for him. In a way, you could say that he stood out by not standing out in any other way. He was good at gaming, but wasn't a programmer. He was creative, but wasn't into art of any kind. When he got his hands on the IRIS Genium with Haven Online, he went in with the idea he would just play another game. He would be surprised to find a new path for himself. As Peter went to explore the game, he noticed this new world made him feel different. It made him feel more confident. He started exploring all the options and found he had a talent for parkour. Something about them made him feel good about himself, maybe even if it was because he kept winning them no mather the difficulty. Though after a while, the parkours he did were getting a bit too easy. It didn't feel like any parkour was a challenge for him anymore. So instead of giving up on parkour, he made his own parkour courses. Under his pseudonym 'KingOP', he released a whole array of courses, each tested by himself, known as the 'Reach HCPK' series. They included courses of all difficulties, but they all have in common that they feel satisfying when you finish them, like you have actually accomplished something. It became a succes, and although almost nobody knows who KingOP really is, both in real life and his Haven Online username, among the parkour community he is a very well known and respected name. [b][u]TALENTS AND SKILLS:[/u][/b] [list][*]Although not used very much in real life, Peter has a very fast reaction speed, which is very usefull while doing parkour in Haven Online, especially with moving platforms. [*]Because of his long gaming sessions, Peter has a lot of mental stamina, meaning he can play longer than most average people.[/list] [CENTER][h3]SpeedyMonkey[/h3] [img]https://pre00.deviantart.net/6a99/th/pre/f/2014/345/f/e/sun_wukong__rwby__by_shippudenbluekonan-d73zjxa.png[/img][/CENTER] [hr] [B][u]STATS:[/u][/B] On a scale of 1-6; 1 being a fresh newbie, and 6 being endgame level stats. STR: ▰▰▱▱▱▱ STA: ▰▰▰▰▱▱ DEX: ▰▰▰▰▰▰ INT: ▰▰▱▱▱▱ WIS: ▰▱▱▱▱▱ LUC: ▰▰▰▱▱▱ [b][u]ABILITIES[/u][/b] --- [B]Ability:[/B] Monkey Tail [B]Description:[/B] His avatar's monkey tail can be used as a real monkey tail, mainly for grabbing items or holding onto structures like lamp posts. --- [b][u]INVENTORY:[/u][/b] [list][*]Red Bo Staff [*]Red Nunchaku [*]Stamina Potion x3[/list] [b][u]NOTABLE FEATURES:[/u][/b] They gathered a lot of in-game currency because of donations from people who liked KingOP's courses. [hider=Parkour theme] [youtube]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WrWMCRlJD6M[/youtube] [/hider][/hider] [/quote] So a few things, not outright denying you but take these into consideration: - I'm looking for around 6-8 sentences minimum for each description area. And if you don't want to go that route, put stuff into bullet points but put a little more effort into it. Your image says more about what your character looks like, but I get the fact he's someone who wants to be Sun Wukong. - Monkey Tail wouldn't be classified as an ability. That'd be like saying a character who's avatar is a werewolf has the [Claws and Teeth] ability. Abilities are more so like [Monkey King] - Speedy is able to create numerous clones of himself that have their own AI and stats based on his own. These clones can do [x] [y] and [z], when they [x] the clone becomes a stone statue and begins to do area damage around its location. When they [y] the clone disappears for short period of time and is granted increased movement speed. [z] is always active and allows the clones to return to Speedy granting a small portion of health back to him. - The three things I put in the inventory were just nonsensical place holders, you should have things in your inventory that make sense for your character.