[@Spoopy Scary] I read it over! I don't have time to give proper feedback at the moment, but the two big things I caught were;
1) Still referring to the character as Not'Ashav, and 
2) The College of Winterhold's been effectively destroyed for all intents and puposes. Word of the Akaviri invasion would have also kept anyone from traveling there regardless if the College's fate didn't reach so far South.