[hider=Elwyn Tully Review][center][h3]Elwyn Tully[/h3]
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[color=red]A titlecard for his family words but not his name? Bold move. Picture is kinda contemporary but i'll live with it. i could live with it more if you cropped it a bit.[/color][/center]

[b]Ser Elwyn Tully of Riverrun[/b]

[i][color=gray]“Ab ipsem ferro.”[/color][/i] [color=red]ain't no latin in planetos, gotta nix it[/color][/center]

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[INDENT][B][SUP][SUB][H3][i][color=gray]Appearance[/color][/i][/H3][/SUB][/SUP][/B][/INDENT][hr][INDENT][INDENT]Elwyn Tully stands tall at an impressive 6'2", with a lean and muscular physique reminiscent of a laborer or farmer, though lacking in mud and grime. One needs not look at him twice to notice his obvious nobility, both in how he carries himself as well as his cleanliness. Despite this, he does not have quite the flashiness that some of the other houses seem to possess and, though quite well dresses overall, does not seem to mind the appearances of his clothes so much as some of his peers. 

This too finds its way into how he walks, a confident step in his strut, a chest puffed forwards, and a confident grin on his lips. Elwyn is, and looks like, a man that knows his own capabilities and knows them well. Never the less he appears outwardly friendly, someone who is not all business but has time for a good conversation, and going as far as to call him 'warm' would definitely not be misplaced. His eyes are relaxed, never shifting from one place to the other, but rather move deliberately like the rest of his body. Movements seem to be relaxed, made in the moment, not overly calculated or wooden, which indirectly is indicative of his personality - relaxed, in the moment, does what he feels like and when he feels like it.

On average, his days are spent in comfortable wear as he goes around his duties in Riverrun, assisting his brother where needed and otherwise tending to chores and tasks around the keep. When it is time to practice, he will change to combat attire, and this is when he truly feels comfortable. His steps become larger, either in confidence or in excitement for what is to come, and he begins carrying himself with even more confidence. His left hand resting on the grip of his sword, the right hand adjusting some armor or swaying as he walks.

His face followed a similar trend, his soldier background proudly on display through a faint, though noticeable scar on his right eye, earned during a tourney. His upper lip is thin, the lower slightly thicker, in a pale pink hue. This is offset by the fiery red hair he has, framing his face and making him appear much more pale than he truly is. With a carefully kept beard and a shorter haircut, it is apparent that while he takes [i]some[/i] care in his appearance, ultimately what he desires most is simplicity and comfort over fashion.

[color=red]His appearance doesn't need to be that long/specific, but I can't really ask you to write less as a a GM.[/color][/INDENT][/INDENT]
[INDENT][B][SUP][SUB][H3][i][color=gray]Reputation[/color][/i][/H3][/SUB][/SUP][/B][/INDENT][hr][INDENT][INDENT]
[list][*] Raised by the Stark family from age 11 to 15, serving as ward and squire to the lord himself, enjoying tutelage in martial matters. [color=red]Scratch off the squire bit, Northmen don't do knights or squires. Specify why papa tully sent him to the North.[/color]
[*] Became friends with the Stark children, and very close with Lynara Stark
[*] A brief, childlike 'relationship' formed between Lynara and Elwyn, built mostly on sharing secrets and keeping them, such as hiding their 'relationship' from lord Stark [color=red]compound those two details into one.[/color]
[*] Elwyn returns home at age 15 to serve his brother, Lucas
[*] A year later a bannerman's bastard jumps from a crowd and attempts to strike Lucas with a hammer. Elwyn ran the bastard through on his own, [s]and later exacted the man's execution as an act of mercy to prevent needless suffering from his wounds[/s] [color=red]just have him kill the boyo for trying to assassinate his brother[/color]
[*] Four years after the attempted assassination on Lucas' life, reports of upstart Frey smallfolk seep in and Elwyn is sent to investigate alongside a squire. Investigating a village, they are beset upon by the Frey sympathizers, though they are quickly dispatched by Elwyn [color=red]I'd like to see more detail here, considering it is the only riverlands event in canon[/color]
[*] As it becomes more and more pressing that Elwyn prepares for the potential disaster of Lucas passing away, it is insisted upon that he finds a wife. Lord Stark found himself most agreeable to offer his former ward and friend of the family, Elwyn, the hand of Elwyn's childhood friend, Lynara
[*] A year later the wedding is concluded, with Elwyn Tully taking Lynara Stark, henceforth known as Lynara Tully, née Stark, as his wife
[*] The following year Lynara suffers a miscarriage, the infant being stillborn
[*] After a period of sadness over Lynara's miscarriage, Elwyn claims victory in a jousting tournament in Riverrun some six months after the fact [color=red]compound those two as well[/color]
[*] A son, named Merrett Tully, is born 9 months later, conceived on the night of Elwyn's victory in the tournament[/list]
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[list][*] His sword has fish scales printed into the grip, with the pommel representing the tail of a fish - the cross-guard representing two fins. On the chappe/rain guard is imprinted the symbol of the Tully family - a jumping trout over two waves.
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[INDENT][B][SUP][SUB][H3][i][color=gray]Relations[/color][/i][/H3][/SUB][/SUP][/B][/INDENT][hr][INDENT][INDENT][list][*] Lucas Tully, Lord Paramount of The Trident, Elwyn's older brother by two years.
[*] Lynara Tully, née Stark, Elwyn's wife
[*] Merrett Tully, Elwyn's one year old son [/list][/INDENT][/INDENT]

[color=red]All in all, not a bad sheet. I'd like you to make me care more about Elwyn, and Lynara as well, after your edit. You spent all your writing energy talking about how he holds his shoulders. I trust you to make the edits necessary, so put him in the Character tab when you're done.[/color][/hider]