[quote=@tobiax]
That's not the main point. You have too many Techniques on the majority of your Digimon stages for their level. For Nyaromon, you have two extra versions of the [i]exact same move[/i] with names that have no citation on the source provided. For Salamon, it's rare for Digimon to have three Techniques for any individual Rookie to use. And having two attacks named "Darkness Wave" for Lady Devimon is just silly.
Also, big leap of logic there bub.
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Just to be perfectly frank. You're being unnecessarily passive aggressive with me. I really don't need to snark, if I'm not giving it back. You decided to PM me about providing baggage likely without any evidence provided. But you are doing that by how you've addressed my points. (Maybe because of those inaccurate assumptions.) 

But a GM and Co-GM (not that I'm pointing fingers at either.) should be able to clearly respond without telling me "how big of a logic leap" the actual CANNON website of the show has provided.

What do you even mean by no citations? No other CS has citations for moves that I see. (Some don't even -have- complete move sets period.) The name of the character links to the website that has all the listed moves...

I said I'm okay with changing them. It wasn't me trying to argue. But it isn't a fault of my own. And it wasn't mentioned on the introductory page, which good OOC's are supposed to have. It's fine to miss something, but I encourage you to add all of this for future interested members. So you don't have to say the same things twice and get people confused for no reason.

And probably the biggest reason I'm typing this the way I am. After all that. You didn't even answer the single question I had asked as a player. "Can I make my own custom moveset?" (Since we're clearly not following in-cannon move sets. Or was I suppose to just grab one from the hat, so to speak.)

[quote=@tobiax]
What I mentioned really doesn't differ from the norm. That is the norm.
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If you think the way you (or anyone else for that matter.) Just blindly creates the exact same digimon roleplay, in the exact same way. So you didn't need to clarify something, you just needed to clarify. You're mistaken. Because not a single other digimon RP I've been into. Not on the forum, or elsewhere had those exact restrictions or requirements. It's also not that way in the games I've played. The card game. Or even the shows for that matter. Not that any of those should be assumed in a roleplay. Everything should be clarified as crystal clear as possible.

[quote=@tobiax]
Yeah... character sheets aren't really in media res. Like ever.
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I don't wish to sound unfair. But read this again and tell me how presumptuous it sounds. Then ask me how did it help me as a potential player to say this? Literally the last digimon RP I was in, did in media res. (least in terms that we already had our introductions with our partners.) 

Off topic, but many genres do this. For instance, most superhero RP's are in media res, because they don't go the powers origin story. Actually most RP stories in general usually don't actually "start" from the beginning at all. Even if it's the "first" time the characters meet. It's already in the middle of war, or some tragic and terrible event. But not even that is true, or occurs sometimes. (Referring to first time meeting characters.) Because it's almost always better to have interpersonal relationships to already work off of. But this is my own personal taste. For you personally, fine and I was willing to accept that. 

But again, that sounds unbelievably condescending and it's not remotely true either.

[quote=@tobiax]
It didn't come across in the character sheet.
And because being a hacker- especially one that's any good, takes time. Lots of time. And time is a limited resource.
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I'll be the first to admit. (Though I kind of did already.) That I could have probably written in more detail and made it clearer. But I mirrored the rest of the character sheets which are very simple and brief. So I admit there's holes, but I figured the blanks were the "time" you could fill in the gaps on what he did with it. Being rich and having everything he wanted, maybe he had some private lessons to speed up the process of learning? I mean, I can tell you super hacker/computer wiz-kids exist in the real world. It's also a trope...it's even -used- in digimon. 

So I was fine with making his background information more clear. But that didn't even seem to be the issue you brought up to me. It was "is expertly socially capable but also a hacker but also a terrible?" Is what you sent to me, which seems to imply the very idea a manipulative and terrible person could also be a capable hacker and have a social life. Was an outright impossibility to have for character traits. 

Which I didn't get...and I still didn't really get a clarification whether you were fine with my character's personality and profession. (and just required more clarification and a better worded bio.) Or if you wholly rejected the character concept...

[quote=@tobiax]
The writing as a whole. Sentences are short and disconnected. Some of them, honestly, are just fragments. They don't have flow in themselves, and don't flow to the next sentence after. As a result, it was hard to understand, and a bit bloated if I may be frank.
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That doesn't actually go into any further detail at all. Actually that sort of makes it broader, by implying not just the biography needs to be changed.

I'm trying to make a character sheet. (as few times as possible. Because it's never been worth, redoing a CS more than thrice.) I don't really want to point of individual parts that make perfect sense and aren't sentence fragments in anyway. So, if there's bits you don't think fit. I would have preferred to have them pointed out. But looking at it, I'm sure I could have improved it's flow...

[quote=@tobiax]
See, this is making me think that you didn't read any other character sheets really. Because while most were on the shorter side, yes, they had enough information, yet were succinct enough, to know who the character is. The reason that it's just "Bio" and not "Biography" and "Personality" is because, honestly, I didn't want the character sheets to be over-bloated brick walls of text. Furthermore, it's so show what their personality is and, more importantly, why, in one place, instead of sprawled out in two places. 
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Not to sound elitist here. I didn't really want to name names, because it feels unrelated to the conversation. But the CS's being "bloated" or "wall-of text", that's kind of how advanced character sheets tend to be. Helk, my CS right now which is longer. I probably wouldn't even consider myself reaching anything above casual levels. But I didn't feel the need to bring it up previously. 

But if I'm seriously going to receive "my sentences are fragmented" critiques and questions if I read the other character sheets at all.

When character sheets have literal endless lists for personality like:
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Personality Traits: Dependent, Reserved, Seldom Talks, Cooperative, Naive, Pessimistic, Defensive on the Outside, Super Soft and Caring on the Inside.
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You're going to tell me that this:
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Odarius has a few screws loose. Easily standing out from the crowd. Ready to be playful and tell jokes to make a crowd laugh, or break out into breakdancing in public. At least he’s good at it. Loves listening to music, especially rap. Extroverted and sociable. However, in serious situations he’s practically fearless and perfectly capable to face his problems head on without hesitation. Having the patience of a patron saint. Along with a undying paternal instinct that will actively fight his more self-centered desires. Finding sentimental value in things like family drawings and worthless trinkets. He’s unfoolable, with impeccable detection of liars or those that have ill intentions. Takes one to know one. His wealth of knowledge both trivial and world-altering is his own personal weapon. Filled with scorn and arrogance, most of his actions are cruel and vindictive in nature. Yet is still unpredictable, occasionally acting like an angel. Despite the appearance that he speaks with devils on either shoulder. Not afraid to show his monstrous side, if someone pisses him off. Or far worse, threatening his “daughter’s” happiness...
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Is lesser par and somehow more fragmented and too short in sentence structure?

I'm sorry. (to both you and the person I used to make comparisons.) But that feels like hard bias to me. Not saying it's against me personally. But the problem with fragmented sentences, certainly seems to effecting me alone.

I'm sure you didn't mean any of your reply in the negative way it certainly came across to me as. But I was simply waiting on a few things to be cleared up before I could simply re-edit my character so it would meet to your satisfaction. But I didn't even get the few answers I sought after all of that.

I think I can safely assume we might already have clashing personalities. So, it may be best for me to abstain from joining. 

Thanks for the chance, and I wish you both the best of luck with your RP.