Quick note: Not sure if you were just writing for how Ghent saw it or if I didn’t get it across well enough, but, just in case, I was attempting to imply that the mist in Margen’s sneeze knocked Drust out. If it’s the latter, I’ll try to make a mental note to be clearer about that kind of thing in the future!

Well. You’re a great writer. It’s not surprising we managed to make it flow nicely. ;-) Even ending it there would have still given enough to move things forward. But I like it better that you added that in there!

I will be sure to let you know if I ever end up calculating that! Heh.

I’m glad to hear it! Oh! Wasn’t expecting the comments. Sweet! Hey, Elayra warned him there would be no talking Drust down if he woke up outside a Safe Zone. ;-)

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My intro to psych teacher was a believer that the "fight or flight" response should have "freeze" added to it, since that is such a common reaction in stressful situations. We know which one Ghent's most prone to, I think! Seriously. You play his fear so well! That he forgot about Elayra being down in the heat of, well, almost getting ran through was great, too. 

And seriously, you can turn some good phrases! Some of my favored lines:

> Any remaining hope was shattered with two words. (... Yes. Just yes.)
> Shock robbed him of his senses and left him unable to react. (There's that "freeze" so wonderfully and simply explained!)
> Hollow Forest was denied another victim...
> It happened so fast and effortlessly, Ghent wondered if Margen was better suited to save Wonderland. (Aww, poor Ghent. Outdone by a spirit fox. xD)
> The state of sleep hardly made Drust appear less threatening, but it was definitely an improvement. 
> She remained where Drust left her, her frame looking smaller than usual against the tall, looming tree. (That's a fantastic contrast. Hadn't thought about that. Awesome sauce! And I like the word "looming.")[/hider]