[@SleepingSilence] Yeah, I can understand that. To be honest, I started writing this piece very unsure just how it would turn out, and how it would be received. Considering you've said you have figured out my style, you must understand that, in these prompts, I like to try and take as much creative liberty as I can so I can have more flexibility when actually writing the story, and, at least from my perspective, the same thing has been done here. 

Since the prompt is Adventure, I didn't want to just have an Adventure. I wanted something more than crossing a landscape, so I opted to try something else alongside it - a character who explores himself and language through the course of the story. The actual idea I was going for from the start was something unsettling, filled with unknowns and a disjointed and broken stylistic approach that created a sense of unease. As you said, the bad grammar and other mistakes are intentional for this purpose, creating a character outside of the known.

In order to have a progressing story line, though, the character has to get better at speaking and writing, so, as well, they have to start off terribly, and then get better. For example, the quote you brought up:

[i]"This is a book, a book I found in a house, a house without walls or ceilings, and without chairs or tables or computer screens to display ruined, corrupted corruption or names. The corrupted corruption of corrupted names on corrupted screens corrupting names. The pen moves but when it moves paper corrupts. Ink corrupts. Black and fluid, then dry and corrupt. I corrupt.[/i]

The thing I was going for this this part, and the other parts similar to it, is that the MC was testing out words, and learning them through usage. They were there to give the sense that the thing in the story was actually learning, that they were attempting to assimilate different parts of what they have seen or heard into their own limited vocabulary as best they can, and failing to do so - hence my attempt at making their prose better, their sentences longer, and their grammar better, as the story progressed. Another example I'd key into, that you also mentioned, would be inconsistency. The inconsistency is present, again, to give the illusion that the character is adapting to the things they are writing and saying and learning. By creating disparities in the things they say, I liked to believe it would help highlight that fact.

Of course, as I said, I went into this unsure exactly how it would turn out and be received. It's no surprise to me that I probably failed in what I set out to do [s]especially when I rushed half of it on the last day XD[/s] 

In any case, thanks for the criticism. Hopefully my next entry will be more likeable in your eyes ^^