[quote=@Vocab]
The prompt is Adventure, I didn't want to just have an Adventure. I wanted something more than crossing a landscape, so I opted to try something else alongside it - a character who explores himself and language through the course of the story. 
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I do enjoy that there's a little more to it than that. I wanted and tried accomplishing the same thing. (least in terms of making it not just an adventure.)

Honestly, I love the idea. Just not the execution. (Honestly I did not notice if your character happened to "go to multiple locations" in your story or not when reading it. So, as long as it fit the general rule presented. The prompt has so few rules, it seems like it should be important to at least follow the ones given.)

[quote=@Vocab]
Hence my attempt at making their prose better, their sentences longer, and their grammar better, as the story progressed. Another example I'd key into, that you also mentioned, would be inconsistency. The inconsistency is present, again, to give the illusion that the character is adapting to the things they are writing and saying and learning. 
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I honestly just didn't understand the progression...It needed to be clearer and more straightforward. Maybe even more over the top. If it was getting better as the story went on, why did it only misspell words over half way through than never again? Nor corrected it's own mistakes again?

And if it was suppose to become longer and subsequently more coherent. Then why even until the very ending are the sentences fragmented?

If it was literally gibberish at the start, then it had continuous writing errors and fragments in the start improving over time to speak more naturally while itself piecing together their identity and the world around them, that could have added another layer.

[quote=@Vocab]
Of course, as I said, I went into this unsure exactly how it would turn out and be received. It's no surprise to me that I probably failed in what I set out to do [s]especially when I rushed half of it on the last day XD[/s] 
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But I sympathize with that, I cranked out my ending pretty quickly and didn't do the editing/polish that I wanted to do.

[quote=@Vocab]
In any case, thanks for the criticism. Hopefully my next entry will be more likeable in your eyes ^^
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I hope so too. Appreciate the response. (Hopefully, I didn't come across too harshly.)