[@vancexentan]
Hahaha, sorry bout all of that~

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Presence concealment too high. King Hassan has normal A Rank. You're saying this Hassan has a better hiding skill than the OG. Further more PC drops much more drastically when activated than just a simple + or two down.

[indent][color=Cadetblue]I don't mind knocking the Presence Concealment down to what the rest of the regular Hassans have which is A+ but with Breathing and Walking, I figured the skill would be able to mitigate the rank drop with the ability to more thoroughly suppress one's presence in that way. Looking at Sasaki Kojiro who has an inherent ability similar to that, I borrowed it and placed it with Breathing and Walking as my intent[/color][/indent]

Eye of Mind False is excessive. Eye of the Mind (False) B is Heracle's rank. Emiya Archer's rank of Mind's eye true is B. You have a better combative mind then a berserking demi-god, and a counter force agent?

[indent][color=Cadetblue]Saying it like that, yeah in terms of ranking Assassin would be definitely inferior to both servants in terms of skill but I'd figure that the Noble Phantasm he would have would augment this ability to match their level. So, would you consider ( B Rank ) as acceptable, provided that the Noble Phantasm of his is active for full effectiveness or gets tossed to a rank down? [/color][/indent]

Art of the mind is somewhat lore breaking but it isn't something I would count against it entirely. 

[indent][color=Cadetblue]You don't have to answer this one but which part (or is it all of it) that is lore breaking/bending? I'd like to know so I don't mess it up in the future since I'm just a Type-Moon normie :P [/color][/indent]
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[quote=vancexentan]
I would honestly just pick a different canon assassin, or go back to the drawing board. Maybe its just that his initial skills are leaving a bad taste in my mouth. 

[indent][color=cadetblue] Of course, that is to be expected when a Servant gets over-proportionally blown up in power (face palming in some regards and sometimes just embarrassing)! Its just that for making Original Servants, I have to make some assumptions that simply goes overboard sometimes with me so apologies again for the eye sore.[/color][/indent] 

Okita Souji (in assassin form), or a debuffed Shuten-Douji (Bone Collector for example is a bit vague) would be my pick out of canon servants but others like Mitsuhide Akechi, or Spring Heeled Jack seem like good servants. 

[indent][color=cadetblue]Okita Souji I wouldn't mind doing in Assassin form but would have nowhere to start (so I'd have to do some research) and Shuten-Douji I wouldn't mind doing as a Berserker. But hopefully the above resolutions aren't too difficult to come to a compromise, if it is the case then I'll pull these two that are on the back burner~ [/color][/indent]
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