[quote=@TheWizardLizard]
Great work so far, guys! Progress on the OOC is coming along, should be done in the next day or so. In addition, though I won't be accepting any characters until the deadline is over, I'm going to try to provide some feedback for the people who've posted CS's already - we'll call that a bonus for promptness. If I provide a note, it doesn't mean that I don't like the character or that you have no chance of being accepted as is, I'm just trying to help you make your character the very best it could be.

[@MegaOscarPwn]

What a fun character! I really like the energy and the sense of fun and adventure that bleeds through in the writing style. My main note is that I'm not super clear about the stand's powers - maybe it's because I don't know anything about Jojo, but the rating system ended up being kind of confusing in practice and I'm not entirely sure what the 'vegetal material' power actually does, so you could stand to make that clearer and just describe what the stand itself is capable of rather than using the rating system.

[@DJAtomika]

Another great character! I was hoping we'd have a submission like this, kind of a grittier, more low-to-the-ground vigilante type of hero. I only have one point of concern, which is the implication that his sister is just as powerful as he is and lives with him - this doesn't really need to be changed if it's an important part of the character, but it could stand to be elaborated on if it's the case.

[@alexfangtalon]

Really cool concept for a character, I like the idea of him as this ringleader of heroic metas as well as the really personal civil war story between all the empowered individuals born of this single event. I have two notes, the first of which is that you could beef up his power level if you wanted (not necessary, but you can), the second is that you could tweak some of the writing to make it read a bit smoother - there's some repetition, some unnecessary adverb usage, some 'to' and 'too' confusion, stuff like that. If you want to shoot me a PM, I'd be happy to go over some of this stuff in greater detail, or not - you can let me know.

[@The Bork Lazer]

Awesome, awesome character. I don't really have any notes.

[@Jaredthefox92]

So, aside from the fact that this is a superhero RP and your character seems to be a villain, this doesn't really fit the idea of backstory as an 'origin story' because there doesn't seem to be much in the way of plot in her backstory. I'd definitely retool that, work her into a more heroic character, and maybe downplay the extent to which she's a ditzy cheerleader stereotype? That last one is optional, but I think it might help her develop into a more human, realistic character.

[@Clever Hans]

Lupo's great! Like with The Tower above, I was hoping we'd get this kind of grittier character more rooted in intrigue than high-flying adventure. I don't have any real notes per se, though I think you could benefit from expanding on his appearance section into exactly how he looks 'wolfish' - we get a better look at that in his backstory, but for simplicity's sake it's nice to have that in the appearance section when other people are writing a post and checking how your character looks.

Really great work all around, guys. I'm already dreading having to choose!
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I guess I could have her be an anti-hero, or perhaps she just doesn't have her luck go from bad to worse? A lot of her backstory was purely just bad luck. I mean, she would potentially help people if there was a need. Think of her like the Hulk in a sense. Basically anger and stress makes her enlarge. Her powers revolve around her emotions and can be "trigged" at joy, sadness, anger, and fear. However, the problem with her is I've made her 'at the start'. Meaning she really is a rogue and by herself at this point. Oh, and she's wanted for her little outbursts. I've been for a while trying to find a group she could perhaps fit in. However, she could be one of those heroes who start off doing bad, but reform. That's an option. As far as her intelligence, it is sort of at "struggles with subjects" level. Like, she never would become a professor or anything, but she can do what normal people can do.