[@Tangletail] Overall I think the issue I have with Montary Jack, aside from the choice of nickname spelling, is that he does not really feel as serious as the world should be. It is tough to be a mouse, and probably tougher if your trade of choice is playing an instrument for tips. He is "a minstrel first and a soldier second", which doesn't feel conducive to what is essentially a story about soldiers, and overall I think you'd have an easier time playing a charismatic former bard. This is a guy who would have already spent years in a military order telling him to cut his shit out or be sent to a desk, so if he hadn't already cut most of his shit out, he'd be at a desk. Jack should be a soldier with vestiges of bard still remaining -- perhaps they've confiscated his instruments but cannot actually ban him from singing. Maybe he's the equivalent of a war drummer, or plays reveille with a horn, or is part of the queen's ceremonial band or something, but otherwise, you should be looking at a character who is less flamboyant as a result of joining the military.