[@BrokenPromise] Aer Pacifica. What a wondrous character. Thank you for gracing us all with this character, which is clearly a gift from the gods. Please put them in the character tab ASAP All joking aside, I let the co GM look over my character. [@Zelosse] I am severely triggered by the fact that you made you character smaller than the wonderful Aer Pacifica. I think she'll make a good addition to the RP, if I'm being honest. I'd like to know more about her backstory, but we talked about enough via pm. Chiyo Kouko is accepted. Post her in the character tab. [@Althiel] I wait your CS, my love <3 [@Letter Bee] Even though your characters don't have divine blessings, I know you expect them to down the road. So I'm going to treat them like characters that do have Dbs. Ashton Andrews is fine as a character, but he's still way too strong for the current power scale. He's a doctor, a walking encyclopedia that contains a guide to how to survive in another world, has return by death, and has above normal magic potential. You've also stated you want this character to be a “generalist,” yet they seem to be less of a jack of all trades and more of a master of all trades. Flame brooks isn't quite as bad. His knowledge is less useful and you at least anticipate that you'd like him to be a mage. But even for a mage, average flow and max tier life energy is extremely high for a non-native. An S is something I'd expect to find on a very small number of natives, and their flow would probably be a bit lower most of the time. I also feel like in this day and age, the level of gay prejudice displayed in his backstory is so incredibly high it's humerus and impossible to take seriously. People can hate him because he's gay, but maybe give him something else that people might actually avoid him for. Another core problem with these characters is that they are both parts of a half. Flame's angst would make for an interesting character dynamic where he distrusts people and doesn't work well with others. But since he's got heart eyes for his boyfriend, they are able to mesh perfectly. That is to say that they were made to perfectly cover each other's weaknesses. And since they are both controlled by the same person, this feels like a blatant attempt at power gaming. This team of two has all kinds of knowledge, is magically stronger than most natives submitted to the RP this far, can return by death, and they haven't even acquired their magical boy transformations. Even in the late game, I'm not sure it would be possible to give either character a magical boy transformation without seriously upsetting the power scale of the RP. They're already very capable mages, and giving them something like that feels excessive. Surely you can understand how powerful these two are together? My suggested corrections for Ashton are to tone down everything: -Make him a vet, fine, but don't also make him a doctor. -I'm not sure a guide to the world of Re: Zero could ever make it into our world, so that should be removed entirely. -Also, his magic is very strong for a generalist. So unless you want to spec him as a mage, I'd lower it to something more reasonable. I could at least consider giving him a magical boy DB down the road if he was something closer to C/C. -Alice also suggested just having him go chuuni and dressing up like a magical boy. Alternatively, you could make Ashton a native. That might be the best option for him, but he'd need to be reworked quite a bit. He would know about the world for free however, and could justify starting out with a DB. But he won't start with return by death. Flame just needs to have his life energy reduced a bit. You could do an A, but a B or C would make it easier (read: faster/possible) to get him a DB magical boy transformation down the road. I'd also like to see his back story made a bit more believable. [@catchamber] Looks good. I like how you listed all of her items. Hilda Gunnarsson is accepted, you may post her in the character tab. EDIT: I noticed you removed everything, two can play at that game! [hider=Hilda Gunnarsson][center][h1][color=f7941d]Hilda Gunnarsson[/color][/h1] [img]https://cdna.artstation.com/p/assets/images/images/003/556/182/large/julia-razumova-gtq-cwabage.jpg?1474979209[/img] [h2]"Hope for the best and assume the worst."[/h2] [b]19 | Female | 61 kg (135 lbs) | 163 cm (5'4") Earth[sub]Dona[/sub] | Non-Native | Human[/b] [u][b]Description[/b][/u] At a glance, Hilda is an easygoing and loyal hedonist with bitter and sweet sides. She aims to dress in clothes and accessories that are comfortable but stylish by modern Earth standards, shunning low quality or ostentatious garb. Her attitude is typically serious or lightheartedly sarcastic, her posture is usually relaxed into a slight slouch, and her mind generally swings between serene calm and intense contemplation. [u][b]Appearance Description[/b][/u] Hilda is a 163 cm, 61 kg, 20% body fat, dark brown eyed, fair skinned, oval faced, dark brown and straight haired, youthful human female with a few freckles on the bridge of her nose. Her [url=http://www.closetfulofclothes.com/wp-content/uploads/2016/11/fashion-muggin-fall-weekend-outfit-oversized-sweater-turtleneck-sweater-black-skinnies-white-sneakers-fall-layers-sweater-over-button-up-fashion-mugging-640x960.jpg]current attire[/url] consists of a grey turtleneck sweater made of cotton, white long sleeve button up shirt made of linen, black elastic sweat pants made of cotton, white sneakers, gold plated luxury diving watch with a thin black strap made of leather, and black shoulderbag made of leather. [u][b]Personality[/b][/u] On the surface, Hilda appears to be a self contradicting individual in many respects. She can be bluntly outspoken about grave matters with a passionate and kind zeal, just as she can present a polite and reserved face to callous and jaded selfishness. While her values fluctuate, her core principles are much slower to change: being determined to achieve goals, seeking knowledge for self improvement's sake, considering the well being of those around her, and treating herself to the finer things in life. Hilda is slow to forget suspicious people, let alone forgive those who wrong her, but she will occasionally reflect on past events from their imagined perspectives. Trust is very important to her, both given and received, yet she is not above casually fabricating, twisting, or obfuscating facts to protect herself and others. Hilda's empathy and kindness is present even when she is destitute, and has a tendency to increase proportionally with her means and the recipient's desperation. [u][b]Bio[/b][/u] Born to a pair of lifelong lovebirds that never got married, Hilda grew up getting used to moving around. Though her parents weren't obscenely wealthy, they could afford to move across the United States multiple times. Hilda resented being dragged with her parents whenever they had issues with each other, and spent many summers working towards living on her own. To keep herself busy, she picked up hobbies like chess, origami, fishing, binge watching TV shows, and preparing for the zombie apocalypse. In spite of her parents' unusual relationship, Hilda formed many long lasting bonds that still persist to this day, and strove to realize her dreams more often than not. She made an effort to keep in touch with her continuously expanding social circle, even if she oftentimes forgot about old contacts for disparate reasons. Hilda rarely shied away from having a good time, sometimes to her own detriment, which eventually resulted in her and her friends getting mugged during a routine late night out on the town. Hilda and her friends survived the ordeal physically unscathed by giving up their possessions, but the event itself made her question the way she lived life. She gradually turned apathetic and pragmatic, and was more cautious around others. Hilda studied and taught herself martial arts, focused on her physical health, and even excised entire swaths of people from her social life. But the party didn't stop, at least not until she was pulled into another world while looking for her keys and charger. [u][b]Magics[/b][/u] 20 [u][b]Abstract Magics[/b][/u] None [u][b]Extra[/b][/u] [hider=Inventory (Black leather shoulderbag)][url=https://i.imgur.com/s4tZNTk.jpg]Black, thin, circular compact travel mirror[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/B5ejZ7X.jpg]Black ink ballpoint pen made of transparent plastic[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/qpoy9eQ.jpg]Black gloves made of waterproof leather[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/86RJidg.jpg]Black colored nail file stick[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/tXZnwAV.jpg]Blue zip-up leather wallet with a white cat and fish motif, containing a photo ID, blue credit card, gray debit card, and $108.65 made up of $50s to pennies[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/sggSrS0.png]Blue, gray, and orange three-finger shaving razor[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/DXyJNjY.jpg]Dark red, wide-toothed comb made of plastic[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/p4kQIvW.jpg]Green plastic lighter[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/1OHC2vd.jpg]Red lipstick container made of white plastic with a black exterior[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/FoVoS2o.jpg]Rose colored and round glass bottle containing rose perfume[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/TLOs6pZ.jpg]Rounded and white colored deodorant stick[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/meyoBxT.png]Sour Patch Kids bubblegum pack with 10 pieces left[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/ffs9M5U.jpg]Steel nail clippers[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/Onpf2Yu.jpg]Steel pocketknife with a black plastic handle[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/CIU0O5n.jpg]Steel tweezers[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/8v0CkOg.jpg]Teal colored aluminum can with 10 oz of hairspray[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/vlvlCvb.jpg]Thin smartphone with a white exterior[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/jMSbeP5.jpg]Transparent plastic bottle with 2 fl oz of hand sanitizer gel[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/ahSSJrN.jpg]Transparent plastic bottle with 20 fl oz of water[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/QmqO7o3.jpg]White 1 foot long USB cable[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/wGardzo.jpg]White microfiber cloth[/url] [url=https://i.imgur.com/lGBvfRj.jpg]White plastic tube containing 10 oz of citrus and lemon scented lotion[/url][/hider] [hider=Themes][h3]General[/h3] [youtube]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k1JmWQMvEsQ[/youtube] [h3]Comedic[/h3] [youtube]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HcohcabthbE[/youtube] [h3]Dramatic[/h3] [youtube]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DNHE7pWjKAg[/youtube] [h3]Jovial[/h3] [youtube]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=85ftfVUTzM4[/youtube] [h3]Lounge[/h3] [youtube]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cxofBaV7ZFk[/youtube] [h3]Melancholic[/h3] [youtube]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Siybe2266ik[/youtube] [h3]Romantic[/h3] [youtube]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KUjp6M370Iw[/youtube] [h3]Violent[/h3] [youtube]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uZmO9Nd_Rws[/youtube][/hider][/center][/hider] [@Tenma Tendo] Grisaia Vertti is almost there. I like how he's sort of a summoner that relies on his shield to defend himself while he's waiting for his mana to restore. But Alice and I think that the shield could be made more interesting. One suggestion was that Grisaia could use any element as long as it was to shield themselves. Another idea was that Grisaia could make an unbreakable shield, but it only covers a small portion of his body. Like a real shield, only it holds up to magic better. But we'd like you to take a crack at making it a bit less strange. [@Seirei No Hai] I like how his DB lends itself to him being a teacher character who can help some of the other characters along. But Gris Ayt Forye is an oni, so naturally he's all kinds of stronk, unless he's missing his horns or something. His DB should just allow him to teach really well, and not also let him learn fast. [@Rune_Alchemist] Chieko Okawa's magic feels a little strong for a non-native spellblade. I'd drop her down to B+/ C- to better mesh with her fighting style. Then she can be accepted. Mie Yukima, aka edgy fox grill, is accepted. You may post her in the character tab. [@Ryofu] I like it! Boxa boi Nobuhiro Nishioka is accepted. Put his sheet in the character tab. [@FamishedPants] The word adversity simply doesn't exist for Alistair Archibald. He has two types of magic, one of which is rare, and somehow without a divine blessing. His ability to use magic is higher than almost all native characters. SSS rank flow doesn't even exist. He's “talented” and just seems to pick up any skill he wants with relative ease. He's good at talking to people, good at fighting, and good at any random activity he decides to partake in. You're even brazen enough to mention he doesn't have any abstract magics “as of now,” like he might acquire even more power later on. While you've billed Alistair as a mage, you've given him the tools to become a “master of all trades.” The only real hindrance is that he needs to practice a skill to become good with it, and because he's arrogant not everyone will want to work with him. But those are both very minor when you realize he has return by death and basically has an unlimited amount of time to master anything he chooses. The character has no real weaknesses. Alistair Archibald is going to need to be toned down significantly if he wants to get into the RP. -Reduce the number of things he's excellent at to just a handful. He can keep that air of pompousness without being a prodigy at [i]everything[/i]. -Decide how important it is to have two types of magic. If he's going to start off with two, his magic scores should be below the average level of C. -If he's not going to have two magics, you can give him a strong magic stat. But nothing at S, and certainly no A/A on both stats. B/B would be okay, but don't expect to get any abstract magics anytime soon. -If you insist on keeping his ability to learn everything at an alarming rate, then he is not a mage. He'll be forced to have one type of magic and average magic stats, and function as a generalist. [hr] And with that, the first round of accepts have been sent out. If you were accepted, great, if not, just make those suggested changes. If you have any questions, you can pm me or [@Red Alice] , or post in the character review section on the discord. I'm probably not going to start things for another week, so you have plenty of time to make edits or post the first rendition of your character. EDIT: [@Tenma Tendo] and [@Rune_Alchemist] have fixed their sheets and are aproved, while [@Letter Bee] and [@FamishedPants] are waiting for a revaluation.