My only suggestion in all this madness as people dawdle about and up to their own brands of shady business, is to mention those you are specifically interacting with or have a very, very high likelihood of noticing you. That way it adds some incentive and pressure upon them to respond, as well as notice at all; a single line in these many paragraphs could be easily displaced. I would rather not have something like that, character interaction, go without notice and ignored.