[@Cyrania] & [@Bane] 

Firstly, Bane!

Thank you so much for getting a sheet in! I know it can be really daunting to do it when you're a newbie. And your sheet is great, just lacking for the Advanced Section of RPG, and I have found that aspects of your character are found in other characters that I have accepted. The personality section was very short and didn't tell me much of him now - how he got like that, how he interacts, if he has any other quirks. I liked the intention behind the story of his fall from a Jedi - and how it was based on his love for another Jedi, but it was very similar to a mish-mash of Anakin's story - his love for Padme and the death of his mother. There's not a lot in the sheet about his journey to being a Sith, other than it seemed to happen after the tragedy. I would have loved to see more. What I did love was that you created a bit of a strange character who went from someone with a lot of potential, to having no eyes and his future taken - just the absolute difference was great. It would have been more powerful with a little extra oomph in that backstory and a few tweaks here and there. 

I'd love for you to go back and work on your sheet more for when applications re-open. Maybe make some tweaks in the story - ask me for any help, suggestions, advice - I'm sure any of us here would assist in beefing up that CS! For now though, I'm really sorry to say that you didn't make it this time. Keep at it though, I believe in you! 

[@Cyrania],

Much like Bane's sheet, yours is just missing a bit of padding around it. There's some interesting work in there, but a few contradictions also. He's a flirt with the ladies, but has few friends and isn't social? He's an Imperial Agent but tired of the Sith and the Empire. This character is a bit of an enigma and there's not enough detail to really weave it together enough. I think removing some of this and just expanding on one, two, or three things would really benefit this sheet greatly. One thing that I really did love was his love of puzzles! I don't know why, but it's what has stood out to me most from the sheet. I love characters with quirks and yeah, that really fits! I can imagine an Operative style character in the RP annoying the crap out of our Sith with puzzles and riddles hahahaha. As with my offer to Bane, I'm sure many of us here would love to give you feedback and help you nail that sheet. I think the concept is solid but maybe more time and tweaks are needed before Evrain will join the Legacy story line. So I'm sorry, that for now it's a no - but please continue to work with us and when the openings come up you will be first to be pinged should you still be interested! Thanks again for making the sheet! :)