I've come and gone from this thread a few times, looking at the character sheets and trying to come up with enough to say to have any worthy critique or comments about the sheets in question.

When it comes to the writing (vocabulary/quality) and the structure. Both of them seem pretty equal. I can imagine both of these character sheets just being a standard/typical submission in a casual pirate role play. But since there is no roleplay attached to the character sheet, which theoretically would grant you the ability to add as much detail and description and background as possible. I feel like they're both a little underdeveloped in my opinion. But that's pretty much all I have to say.

Suggestion for improvement:

Callie: The skills being a grocery list could be expanded upon and given more detail to make them feel more like a character. It's also completely subjective but not fond of the name either. (I guess the nickname is silly enough that it fits a more light hearted affair.)

LaserSquid112: The proficiency chart isn't defined. So it's meaningless without context. I do not know what the lines mean. I wouldn't know if no lines mean they couldn't use the weapon/do said task. I don't know if one line means poor and two lines mean average since it's a three line basis. I would have suggested to change it into words or description instead.

My Winner & Why: LaserSquid112's sheet had more personality and character, in the character sheet. The vulgarity, shouting and the occasional musing brought some life into the description. So he has my vote.