[@TwilightShadow]  I have some questions for you.  Firstly, it seems like you've left a great deal out of your characters' backgrounds.  Pepper was grabbed by a mysterious man who killed her parents...does she know he did?  Is he still around?  Why did he send her to Polytech instead of Geraldine's?  Did he give her training so she would pass as at least marginally respectable beforehand?  For Vis, who was this lady?  Is she still an important person in Vis's life?


[@buffykdh] Right.  He does look good.  Obviously I need to confer with Ayz, but I like what you have.  I slipped; he'd have entered Polytech just as Alys and her brother were graduating, so there's minimal chance of them meeting there.