Here are my reviews. I didn’t actively check any of the stories for grammar mistakes, but if I caught some I will mention it. Generally I review the story as a whole, what impact it had on me as a reader, what I liked, what I didn’t like, things that were confusing, etc.

[@Rosenrot]
[hider=Review for Flesh&Steel]
Correct me if I’m wrong, but is this a continuation of a story? There are some details that aren’t given here that I miss and could very well have been explained in an earlier chapter (if there is one). Take the slave, how did she end up being a slave of Adelaide? And for that matter, how did Adelaide end up there if humans aren’t usually at such positions in the Dol'Vrah?

When the story began I thought Adelaide was one of them, until you mentioned she wasn’t as tall as the inhuman Dol’Vrah.
Another minor inconsistency is between Adelaide shaving lord Sigfried and them returning to the camp. Apparently she had tasted his blood somewhere between the events, but it wasn’t described or hinted towards, so it came out of nowhere.

That being said, I enjoyed reading about the Dol’Vrah, you gave enough details for me to form a picture about them, some of their habits and their structure. The intrigue and power struggle, I like reading such stories.
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[@BrokenPromise]
[hider=Review for Evolution MKII]
Amy is a humonculus, I didn’t see that twist coming. I mean, I knew there was something up, but not that. I would have guessed she was the last human alive.  

Grammar wise, the thing I noticed a few times in the story was the passive form where you could have used the active. 
[i] she knew that papa was going to come in[/i] --> she knew that papa would come in
[i] While she was recovering[/i] --> while she recovered
[i] Fortunately she was wearing something other ...[/i] --> Fortunately she wore something other ...
There are more, those are the first three I came across.
I know I used the passive voice a lot too, until someone pointed it out. Nowadays I try to avoid using passive when active can be used and I seem to spot it more easily in other people’s writing too :) which is why I decided to mention it to you.

The growth spurt comment threw me off, what second growth spurt is she referring too? Humans generally have stopped growing at the age of 19. So if the second growth spurt is something normal there, a bit more background information could be needed.

Do the androids in your story have a respiratory system or something similar that would allow them to sigh? That androids can have emotions and behave very human like is definitely possible, but I wouldn’t expect an android to sigh. Unless it is part of their design, like a kind of air vent to cool the system or something? Personally, the sighing android made him feel less like an android, but that’s probably just because I have an image about androids in my head and it didn’t fit that image. 

Lastly, she pretty quick to accept the situation as is, I’m not sure how I feel about that. I guess I was waiting for more emotions there.

Overall I enjoyed reading it. The interaction between Amy and Hank was cute.
I must say I loved Hanks first explanation, it sounded plausible and I was all ready for a story about androids being in power after taking over peacefully XD 

The last sentence was strong. Powerful. I loved it. 
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[@PlatinumSkink]
[hider=Review for Mischief in the machines]
Fairies against machines. Great idea. I loved reading their struggle with the strange technology and how they did their best to make sure they couldn’t conquer other worlds as well. 
Overall the story is well paced and I’m glad they had a happy ending (for now). I’m sure nature will recover so they’ll have new forests to play in <3
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[@Silver]
[hider=Review for Batten Valley]
This is the first time I read a you-story. I prefer third-person, but I wasn’t bothered by the second-person in this entry. 
Everything was well-described and gradually more details about the situation are given. I could see me there, walking around.
The magic of the you-perspective was broken when the ‘you’ got a name, and gender, that wasn’t my own. At that point I couldn’t place myself in the place of the main character anymore, which I think is the purpose of a you-story? Or not? This is the first one I read so I’m not entirely sure. Anyway, since this story was about Vance, I personally would have preferred a third-person story. 

Regardless of that, the story, the plot, good job. 
The error code at the end, that is a great touch.
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[@Exit]
[hider=Review for Sunday]
This entry is made of radio/television-fragments? Like someone changing stations looking for something to listen to/watch?
It’s original and I liked that. 

There’s several clues as to what had happened, but I miss something between the part of the conflict in the west and the selling of the eyes, that were probably used in that conflict and were able to be purchased before that part of the conflict. It would explain more what had happened. A few more clues about who or what the purists were would have been nice as well, unless it was your purpose to keep it this vague.
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[@Vocab]
[hider=Review for The Program]
Very interesting, all the articles between the test subject(s) entering the program. Gradually you get an idea of what is going on. I was as surprised as the test subject when the truth was revealed. 
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[@SleepingSilence]
[hider=Review for Act1: into the dumps]
You certainly have a way with words and you provide a lot of details of the scenery. The story doesn’t read fluently, but that could be my fault. I had to concentrate on this story a lot more than I had to do reading the other entries to really understand all that was written down. Some parts I read over twice. The sentences are clever and rich, full of descriptions. Some go on a bit too long.

I’m definitely not a grammar expert, so I looked up what I wanted to mention, and you seem to use the present participle a lot in this entry, verbs ending at -ing. And overall there were a lot of words ending with -ing. 
Just one example: “appeared to be wearing a suit of torn apart flesh” can also be written as “appeared to wear a suit of torn apart flesh. 

Overall, the idea is intriguing, at the end of the first act we still don’t know who or what the main character is. Neither am I entirely sure who or what Rytok is. It’s definitely promising and will keep the reader interested in the rest of the story
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[hider=my vote]
I vote for Flesh & Steel. 

Although I have to add it was hard choosing with so many good entries. Good job everyone :)
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