[@Calle] No. I'm sure that has to do with lack of given polish on my end. I fully intend on tearing into my own work with a critical lens. Because I understand my writing well. And I decided I didn't really like my story very much. And perhaps maybe I'll shed some light on what other acts would've been, and how I intended to write it. The sentences are extended to combat the accusations/actual writing errors of sentence fragments. I'll have to give another glance at the work, to see if I created a few run-on sentences in its place. I'll also look into that as well, because the latter probably is the correct/concise way to construct those sentences.

Appreciate the review.

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I have read and written two reviews. A flu shot kicking my ass and busy days/nights have made the process take a while. I hope I'll have more good things to say, so I don't come across so overtly negative. They're still coming along.

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Edit: [@Silver] Thanks for the review as well.