[quote=@Katthaj] [img]https://cdna.artstation.com/p/assets/images/images/000/274/036/large/%D0%91%D0%B5%D0%B7_234-2.jpg?1414522579[/img] [Center][h1] Carrie Smith [/h1][/Center] [Center] "Dont worry boys Angels here" [/Center] ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ [Center] Name [/Center] [Center] Carrie "Angel" Smith [/Center] [Center] Gender [/Center] [Center] Female [/Center] [Center] Age [/Center] [Center] 24 [/Center] [Center] Place of Birth [/Center] [Center] Titan - Sol system [/Center] [Center] Military Branch [/Center] [Center] UNSC 25th Specialized Medical Corps [/Center] [Center] Appearance [/Center] [Center] Carrie is very charismatic turning heads when she drops in with her medical team giving her the nickname Angel. she is 5'7 making her the smallest in her team, her hair is exceptionally kept, She is very often seen without her helmet on so she can give people hope on the battlefield when she enters. her build is decent for a medic in the UNSC but nothing compared to some of her teammates, her shape is one that would be compared to goddesses making the most undisciplined of soldiers make sure they are in check when she walks by. To get back to her face she has blonde hair that looks more golden than yellow, her eyes are grey with a splash of light blue [/Center] [Center] [hider=Attire] [u][img]https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/427502701681573898/494792586628956170/unknown.png[/img][/u] ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Carrie is fit with quite a basic medic Attire her helmet is custom made to be open in the front fitted with goggles that help her analyze what she needs to take care of first and it also helps her run triage if there are to many patients to take care of everyone, looking at her upper body her shoulder-pauldrons are standard issue put they have red painted wings on them, on the back of her body armour she has bigger angel wings painted on it, everything else is standard issue making her not stick out alot compared to some other medic team leaders [/hider] [/Center] [Center] Weaponry [/Center] [Center] [url=https://www.halopedia.org/M45_shotgun]M45 shotgun[/url] [url=https://www.halopedia.org/BR55HB_battle_rifle]BR55HB Battle Rifle[/url] [url=https://www.halopedia.org/Combat_knife]Combat Knife[/url] [/Center] [Center] Fireteam [/Center] [Center] [hider=Medical Team Phoenix] [h1] >2ndLT Richard "Reaper" Scott< [/h1] >Medical Team CO/IC - Triage Specialist - Richard and Carrie went to the same training ground to become Triage Specialists while being there they built a relationship that ended in them falling in love with each other and asking command to put them in the same squad together they were both top of the line Triage Specialists but Richard went missing 2 months ago during a mission - M.I.A< [h1] >1stSGT Simon "Sunlight" Young< [/h1] >Medical Team - 2IC - Rescue Specialist - Simon got assigned to the team during Operation Blood Splatter he was used to getting civilians out of falling buildings and making sure that none of the people that could be rescued got left behind, he got on well with Richard and got promoted to 2IC when he disappeared - Alive< [h1] >SGT Carrie "Angel" Smith< [/h1] >Medical Team - Triage Specialist - Alive< [h1] >SPC Edwin "Ghost" Ward< [/h1] >Medical Team - Operator - The job of an Operator is to while getting to the destination asses the situation and see what needs to be done first and where they are needed the most so it's a very crucial job that Edwin was very good at. Edwin was killed in operation Blood Splatter with a shot to the head while peeking over the barricade - K.I.A [/hider] [/Center] [Center] Rank [/Center] [Center] Sergeant [/Center] [Center] Specialisation [/Center] [Center] Medic, Triage Specialist [/Center] [Center] Personality [/Center] [Center] When Carrie is on the battlefield she is usually messing with the people she is helping and likes to tell them stories while helping she does this to calm them since bleeding out on the battlefield and not knowing if you will survive is very stressing, she does get annoyed when the commanding officer of the mission does not trust her professional opinion on who is able to save. When there is downtime she usually likes to calm herself and tell jokes to get the morale of the troops up so that they don't dwell on the losses that they have faced in the mission. [/Center] [Center] Biography [/Center] [Center] Carrie lived on Titan with her Dad, Mom and Brother. Her family is a military family as both his Mom and Dad are UNSC Communications officers and his older brother is a Frigate pilot, They decide to move to the main city on Titan and that is where Carrie joined the medical school for the UNSC where she got accepted with a straight A record and got deployed when she turned 18 after 2 years in the field she decided to become a Triage specialist this is where she met Richard. During the 1 year training to become a Triage specialist Richard and Carrie got very intimate and became a couple during the last month of training which both pushed them to work at 200% so that they could both become the best in their field, when triage school was finished she got assigned to Medical Team Pheonix where Richard was the Commanding Officer [/Center] [Center][hider=Service-History] [Center] [h3] >Operation: Vigilant Angels< [/h3] >The goal of Vigilant Angels was to help ground units being bombarded by Aerial attacks and Ground units, Essentially making sure that casualties while waiting for ODST to arrive to help push the enemy back - Vigilant: Sucess with massive casualties - Vigiland Angels: Partial Sucess, there were too many casualties to be called a sucess< [h3] >Operation: Blood Splatter< [/h3] >Operation Blood Splatter was a cleanup operation for Operation Sand Devil that destroyed many civilian colonies in the process of clearing out the enemy that decided to hide underneath the cities. Blood Splatter was partly a rescue op and partly an operation to clean up the rest of the enemy that the main force missed - Sucess with minimal casualties< [/Center] [/hider] [/Center] [Center] Theme Song [/Center] [Center] [url=https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cvaIgq5j2Q8]Angel with a shotgun[/url] [/Center] [/quote] I'm not one to be too picky, but there are quite a lot of mistakes with the CS. There isn't much formatting done with it and there are a lot of spelling and grammatical errors. I don't mean to be as harsh as I sound, but I will need to see more improvements with this CS until I can consider accepting it. On top of that, the biography is lacking in information and the information on Titan seems too vague. Titan is, from my knowledge, a industrial colony/moon for the Solar System. It'd be difficult to get any military training there in the first place, let alone medical training.