"Much less controlling." Don't be controlling with her, period. Give ME the chance to write for her. Otherwise, you may as well be writing the story yourself.

Anora will be rendering the events of your post temporary void after this paragraph:

[quote=Mortim]"We're taking one of these metal wagons. You're piloting." Darsby speaks quickly, weakly gesturing with his gun towards the nearest parking lot. He begins to hobble in that ordered direction, his bare feet softly pattering against pavement and grass.
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Unless he wouldn't stop even if she reached out or stepped in front of him to stop him. Which is kinda my roundabout way of asking if she would actually be capable of touching/stopping him, or if he would do that avoidance thing he did before. xD Then it's after this one:

[quote=Mortim]Should Anora need encouragement, Darsby would have likely shouted "We don't have time! Get in!" as sirens and other such emergency personnel begin closing in on their present location. Coughs start to rack his still-sundered frame for several seconds [s]before both doors are presumably closed.[/s] [Strike-through would be void.][/quote]

I think I've said it before, but please, stop at points where my character(s) decision could possibly cause a difference. So far, most of what you have put would have happened regardless of what Anora did and you added reactions for your guy in the event she followed, but this time, that's not exactly the case. Don't assume: Stop and post. Post lengths very. You're going to have times where 1000+ words are appropriate, and instances where 300 or under are what is required. Let me make and show Anora's decisions. Don't assume. Just means posting shorter posts. Which I'm good with. Heck, I prefer a variation of lengths. Only exception for me are auto-hits when my character is obviously (or intentionally) outmatched. If there's something the GM knows my character just CAN'T do or intends for them to be weaker and/or incapable of reacting, then so be it! 

Suggestion: Copy/paste the rest of that post in a document/Google Docs, save that, then delete the rest from the post. That'll eliminate the controlling aspect. Trust me, play your (and Darsby's) cards right, and she'll get where you want her. Just yeah, give ME the chance to get her there on her terms and when I know she'd go there. You may have to alter some minor things, but that's kinda the point of a RP with someone, isn't it? The unpredictable aspect and the need of using your imagination and wits to get a feel for that other character not in your control. And working around their reactions/decisions.