Some twangs and nothing lasting. Gotchya. Glad I asked. Writing suggestion, though, then, if that’s the case? And if it's not overstepping bounds or anything. Maybe think about watching the intensity of your wording. The way you have most things phrased indicate more than some simple twangs! “[u]Maelstrom[/u] of nerve-based [u]calamity[/u]”, “Light and heat [u]splinter[/u] her innards,” “rivulets of ice [u]pierce[/u] the entirety of what may have once been called her spine,” “before [u]hell[/u] had overtaken them.” All words that incite the image of, “HOLY CRAP, I’M DYING!” to the unsuspecting soul! xD 

Hope it's okay I posted before you got the second part of your post put up! Let me know if you decide to add it still? The site doesn't notify me of edits. Just new posts. And please, if I get overbearing or anything--be it in IC or OOC--don't hesitate to say anything.

Also, go us for making it to the second page!