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[@DocRock]: Well, if it's feedback you want, it's feedback you'll get. Lessee...

I'd recommend reading the form out loud to catch any grammatical or spelling errors, but let's dig into the form itself.

1. Japanese server, American player? I do believe proxies are a thing, but I guess it's on us for not implying that there were global servers. If you can come up with justification (e.g. transfer student or study abroad or something), it's fine.
2. You can get away with being relatively vague in regards to what a character can or cannot do in terms of abilities or skills. Hell, I'm expecting a lot of people to make stuff up on the fly, so no need to explicitly limit yourself to what you have there. It's fine to be vague.
(Besides, MMO skill trees are [i]giant[/i]. No need to make it a list, basically.)
2.5. I think I'd consider 'investigation' a personality trait more than a skill, but details.
3. You can cut out most of the stuff after the character gets chucked into the game world and use that as an intro instead. No need to place that into the backstory when it isn't really 'backstory' as much as it is current events.

That's my 2AM two cents.

Edit: Right. No cash shop races. That's NG. I'd appreciate if you could tweak that.
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Alright thanks, tbh, I was writing it at about one am myself, and rushing(since at the time I had to get off early), so if I did overlook some spelling or grammar errors, whoops. I can fix up the skills, and change stuff that are implied or outright stated as cash shop to normal stuff. I can also slip investigation into personality, and go for transfer student route. Same for removing the bit at the end about arrival. Anything else? I'll make the changes when I get back from my winter term class, early morning college courses are painful.