[quote=@Mag Lev]
[@The1Rolling1Boy] I've taken a look at him and, unfortunately, I'm still going to have to deny him. Your revisions were fine however I've recognized that you are new to roleplaying. Under normal circumstances, I'd offer to tutor you in some way however, with my IRL job as it is and this roleplay, I'd be unable to give you the full attention you need to become better. You aren't lacking in commitment as you were willing to go back and try again even after losing a revision. Your experience and the necessary skills that come with it, however, have yet to develop fully. Unfortunately, I feel you'd quickly fall behind in light of the other two I have accepted thus far. 

However, I will PM you at a later time with a comprehensive break down of your sheet and offer any tips I have in order for you to improve. Do not stop trying, friend.  
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thank you!