[@LukasVolkov]: Okay so...

To begin with, you made a Saber and barely mentioned her skill with a sword. Which, notably, was extremely high: She was a duelist who most notably fought off multiple men in one of her most famous duels.

You inexplicably give her the ability to [i]breath fire[/i] rather then give her any kind of sword skill or anything of that nature as a Noble Phantasm. You don't even reference the famous incident where she set a fire in a church to run off with one of her female lovers who had been forced to become a nun, which seems like a natural inspiration for a Noble Phantasm.

Her skills are barely related to her story aside from "was very well-known". The Duelist Focus skill actually contradicts one of her most notable fencing exploits.

PKMN already covered the problem with the mind control skill.

I'm sorry if this comes across as sort of harsh, but La Maupin is a really interesting historical figure and you've not really done a good job converting her into a Servant or in making a Saber-class Servant in general.

The current NPs need to be scrapped. She should really have some sort of sword skill, something like some of the Japanese Servants have, mentioned there. Perhaps something related to combining fencing and performance. And an NP related to the convent burning seems like a natural choice given what a notable part of her life it was. The Skills need a complete rewrite.