[@Altered Tundra] I'm probably nitpicking really hard this time, but let's begin. I don't really see where her skills come in because absolutely [i]none[/i] of it is brought up in her backstory. Okay, I can buy a rich douchebag making his daughter take self-defense lessons (especially if it's really to rein in her rebellious nature), but you say that she has an extensive background in athletics but don't really go into what. I want all skills to have a justification and not feel... tacked on, and that's what Arie's skills are somewhat. Idk where you're going with the vigilante angle, but I don't really see her being a vigilante imo.

Though I find it nonsensical that she keeps up with her martial arts lessons because lessons are expensive af. Take it from someone who did it for like five years at like three different studios, it's at least $120+ on average.

[quote]Mossos Industries, which served as a front for various shady business deals[/quote]

I would like this explained... like I could be being overly literal, but are they literally a front for shady deals or they're a legitimate business that just does some shady shit?

[quote]She’d just utilize her creative mind by outthinking her father and use the balcony and the staircase just a foot and a half below.[/quote]

Worst. Guards. Ever.

In terms of her power it's essentially a gayer version of Johnny's power. It's okay overall but one thing sticks out.

[quote]‘With minimal focus, Ava’s energy fields can withstand almost all forms of non-weaponry physical attacks and some basic to intermediate elemental attacks. It can withstand a close-range shotgun blast, although repeated shots may be another story. With absolute focus, it’ll take 4-5 consecutive shotgun blasts to pose a threat. Multiple forms of guns and offensive forces may pose a challenge as well.’[/quote]

Lemme quote junk

[quote=@Junkmail]A 7.62 round fired from an AK-47 has the same amount of energy as a 200lb football player running at 15 miles per hour.
A shotgun blast, depending on if it’s birdshot, buckshot, slugs, etc will have slightly more/less. Something like an AR would chew through her shield. Someone like Henry can pretty much one-shot the shield without any trouble, but the rest of the cast is pretty fucked without a gun or a weapon (given the time to make multiple swings) lol[/quote]

Which is okay given her damage output isn't all that good. My only thing is that she shouldn't be able to use all three abilities at once, and she doesn't have any actual weaknesses. Her concentration weakness is more of a limit for me, but lemme come up with something.


[quote]Alias: Ava Brie Mosconi
Real Name: Avalina Brielle Mossos[/quote]

Not a very good cover name. lol 

Though I'm not really sure why she even needs an alias since you didn't indicate if anyone was after her.