[quote=@AXIS] [hider=my Marospire][b]Name(s)[/b]: true name is Daxterian Misfire  [PH1] Rabecca morstone [PH2] Alaina Morian [PH3] Alister Malking [b]Race or Species[/b]: Marospire [b]Sex[/b]: undefined (they/them pronouns) [b]Appearance[/b]: [URL=https://s70.photobucket.com/user/Rei_sama/media/Anime%20girls/KendoSamurai.jpg.html][IMG]https://i70.photobucket.com/albums/i89/Rei_sama/Anime%20girls/KendoSamurai.jpg[/IMG][/URL]  [URL=https://s1116.photobucket.com/user/AnimeAlbum/media/Originals/Original%20Females/61e5bcf20e11cafdf757ed2d72c0269086457d99.jpg.html][IMG]https://i1116.photobucket.com/albums/k561/AnimeAlbum/Originals/Original%20Females/61e5bcf20e11cafdf757ed2d72c0269086457d99.jpg[/IMG][/URL]  [URL=https://s274.photobucket.com/user/Remonic/media/Anime%20Boys/Ehren.jpg.html][IMG]https://i274.photobucket.com/albums/jj246/Remonic/Anime%20Boys/Ehren.jpg[/IMG][/URL] [b]Age[/b]: unknown [b]Quirks[/b]: is a non physical being who uses the bodies of the dead preserving their life forces by feeding on the emotions of unsuspecting beings they encounter [b]Interests[/b]: connections with emotional sustainability. Sadness. Sustain. All things negative [b]Disgusts[/b]: happiness and free thinking. [b]History[/b]: Thousands of years ago in the small town of anacosta. A young boy was born with violet eyes and charcoal hair, his name, Daxterian Misfire. This young boys existance was an enigma. No-one believed he deserved to live. Young dax was viewed as a demon and murderer from his birth due to his genetic abnormal eyes, and the disposition of his mother's passing during his birth. At a young age Dax showed signs of hyper intelligence and lack of emotion. In modern days we would treat this as psychopathy but young Dax didn't fair to be able to grow up in such a time as we do. Ostracized by family and stranger alike the young boy would never make good with the inhabatance of this town. These treatments led to a change inside his child mind and he began plotting everyone's dimise. 13 years following the birth of young Dax he vanished into thin air and a few short months later others began to vanish only to be found weeks later deceased and in pieces. This happened for almost a year before suddenly it stopped as though almost nothing had changed.  In the years following Dax hid and was all but forgotten until one day something happened. 4 years after the murders Dax suddenly appeared in town again but there was something different about him, something ominous. His eyes seemed lifeless and droll and he exhibited dangerous auras. The town was concerned and watched with hesitation as he walked to his family home. Sword strapped to his side he kicked in the door unsheathing the blade. His father was the first to go as he slaughtered his family one by one. Before turning on the town slaughtering all and reducing it to ash burning him self alive In the flame. Dax awoke years later to complete darkness and a need to feed on the misfortune of others. He had become the ghost we now today refer to as Marospire. Marospire are typically just harmless gas eaters but his hateful nature had caused him to become something much more hostile, a mind eater. Through the years Dax has existed as a gust of wind causing sadness everywhere he goes. Eventually he was able to hone his abilities as a Marospire and learned the art of possession. He gained possession of three humanoid corpses that he has continued to use for years to blend into society and feed unnoticed. Many a year has past since the happenings of the life of Dax and the stories of the destruction of Anacosta have become that of myth and legend. Scary stories you tell children to make them behave, but believe you me. They are all to real and Dax is still out there hunting, hiding, stalking. Do you know who he is, or was? You might not, but you will. [b]Temperament Traits[/b]: open-minded. Creative. Impulsive. Generally disagreeable. Erratic. [b]Trade[/b]: merc. [b]Skills[/b]: possession. Hand to hand. Slight of hand. Stealth. Detection.[/hider] Tada! ^_^ [/quote] Very nice. It's all looking pretty good; there are just a few areas I'd like to question, if I may? First off, the Quirk description is spot-on, however, the marospire is a species of creature in and of itself, meaning they don't typically start out as people. Although, if that is a feature you'd like to introduce (as an anomaly or otherwise) we surely could do that. It's an interesting backstory, after all. What do you think? (Also, where is Dax stowing their bodies and what biome was Anacosta in? Is Dax still nearby the destroyed town? Need to know so I can place them on the map, a map which I have posted under a new "Exploration" tab under Gameplay Mechanics.) Secondly, this is my fault, I'm sure, the actual Temperament Traits to pick from are under the [s]white[/s]gray [b]bolded[/b] labels. For instance: "Free-thinking" is an [b]Open-minded trait[/b] under the [color=ffcc00][b]Intellect[/b][/color] category. [s]I'll need to reword my instructions in the post.[/s](I think I changed things to be clearer.) There should be thirty total traits to pick from. And lastly, each character just starting out has a limit of [u]2[/u] skills. "Possession" is fine, of course, because that's a natural ability, but you'll need to pick two out of the four others ("Hand to hand. Slight of hand. Stealth. Detection."). After that's all done feel free to consider the character accepted. ---------------------- [@The Bork Lazer]Ah, got it. Alright, sounds good to me!