[quote=@Hitman] Woah, that was quick. Good character idea! A few points of note that I'd like clarified- [list] [*]Her being physically weak somewhat contradicts her intensive training. While not all people are born with the same level of physical fitness, it would seem that Alexandria would be [i]somewhat[/i] physically competent, what with 15 years of rigorous training by her family. [*]Personality could be more fleshed out, seems a bit short, even though House Lionheart is a rather straightforward one, personality wise. [*]Backstory could use a hair more info, I'd like some details about her family and school life, if possible. Doesn't need to be a novel, but a solid two paragraphs give a good idea about where characters come from [s]also, mind-reading demons need to mind read[/s] [/list] Overall, good concept and I look forward to seeing what this character will become! [/quote] [list] [*] True enough. In my mind, I was imagining that her training was more focused on magic and gunplay than physical strength. Combined with her being a petite girl makes her not have much physical strength. I guess she could be more focused in agility and speed than raw strength physically. [*] I'll try to flesh out her personality more [*] Ah, okay. I'll try to add that. [/list]