[@Saltwater Thief]

I'm not really a first come first serve type person.

[@Hammerman]

From what I can tell, there's no real core issues I can spot. I would, however, ask you to tone the ecchi stuff down a touch. As perverted danmachi is already, I don't want to ride the edge of what's acceptable on this site. Just a lil som som to keep in mind.

Also you posted your image twice so you can remove the one under appearance.