This is the.... parararararata!

[h2][b]PRELIMINARY REVIEW![/b][/h2]

Note that this is just to get you a heads up on the little things. It's going to focus mostly on the thematic fixing and minor ability changes and will probably have only a microscopic effect on me actually accepting characters tomorrow. After all, considering characters based on little thematic flavourings instead of the character personality and junk themselves is kind of weird. Don't feel the need to fix all of this within 24 hours or however long you read all of this kind of stuff! This will have practically no bearing on your character. Going to reiterate this point. Fixing the lil' things I say in this will have very little effect on who's picked for the maximum good-vibes party comp. Though, I'd still want it all to be fixed by the IC release (IF YE DARE GET ACCEPTED)

Now, if I missed you (I DON'T THINK I DID?), ping me and I'll go hard. If I myself get the Danmachi lore wrong, holla at me. My memory is permafucked and some sources aren't as reliable.

And without further ado: my bizarre and terrible way with words!

[@Vox]
Just because I'm doing everyone, I gotta felate you again and say that it's thematically perfect. Don't let it get to your head, or I'll call you stinky to lower your ego.

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[@RC3]
Marigold is mostly thematically fine. If you like, wanted the race to be Giant, I'd be fine with it. It's thematically in tune with the universe. But it's not a big problem if they're a human. After all, there's a 5'11" dwarf in Danmachi so being the Danmachi equivalent of [url=https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WFoC3TR5rzI&t=12s]Scott Steiner[/url]. Be a giant race if you want, or continue to be a human. Either way is fine.

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[@Renny]
straight up you gotta add "has a chance" to diafanís tychí. Having constant rare drops is a bit too wild for me to deal with. Besides that, some lore fixes: Gods don't have human lives in Danmachi. They're still gods; they've just descended from heaven.

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[@eRode]
Same deal as Vox. I legally can't tell you it's good lore-wise or else I gotta insult you to keep your ego in check.

also i didn't make thoth a thot because smell my socks nerd :dab:

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[@Argonaut]
A bit too many skills, I would say. All of them are pretty strong, too. I'd honestly suggest on cutting one and weakening another, but eh. The backstory is pretty wrong, though. I'm avoiding like, 95% of the canon story so Ares probably won't be in this incarnation where he constantly invades Orario to prove he has big weenie. Plus gods can't have children. 

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[@Barioth]
He's a god damn genetic freak with weird long arms. Which is a top notch choice, beeteedubs. I'd say that Sanguinem Ludo really wouldn't be a rare skill because 1) it's not really that strong, and 2) one-on-one boost wouldn't really be that rare. Comedically enough, Inspirante would probably be rare because most mind fatigue related stuff is all passive regen or regen after casting spells.

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[@Spectral]
I'd probably end up slightly changing the spells because the vast majority of magic requires chants. Name convention is a tiny bit out of flavour, but that's because Danmachi spells range from foreign language to weird chuuni shit 99% of the time. I would probably just help fix the magic where you to be accepted tomorrow.

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[@Odin]
is kanabo in vogue or something? In regards to the skill—thank god I'm not counting numbers, being skill accountant is lame is heck. You'd still have a higher STR gain that everyone else though. Basically, it's the perfect flavour town ability.

Now here's a tiny thing just going forwards. The gods in Danmachi are undeniably human-looking. They have pretty skin and banger hair, but they're human. I recognize that the author has made this decision, but given it's a stupid ass decision, I've elected to ignore it. Having gods that look not as human is fuckin a-okay and there's very little reason why not to have it.

Gods are also weak as fuck while they're on not!Earthrealm so her entire killing persona is going to be directed on the private property of other people and gods. Maybe she can get a fly or two, but even a level 1 adventurer with garbage stats could beat her in a fight. Not that they would ever fight her; fighting gods = perma fucked in the afterlife. This is more of a heads up.

Also, if you think that character concept might be a bit too small-brained, you really do live on a peak above us all. I've seriously written a character that was literally a massive head with arms and legs attached in a monster girl RP. [i]A monster girl RP.[/i] I'm literally the dumbest motherfucker in existence, all characters are serious to me.

So in conclusion:

YA BOI'S GOOD.

Don't actually why I wrote so much when nothing's wrong.

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[@BeefJerky]
Same kinda stuff about gods from above applied here. Non-human gods are cool.

The god is def. a bit of a problem, though. Every single god in Danmachi is based on an actual god. From what I can tell, there's really no ancient god named Moth who acted as ye olde travel agent. It's also a bit weird because in the Danmachi mythos, people don't really pray to the gods, though. Pretty sure about it, anyways. Not sure if wishing to date a big-chested loli legally counts as praying. He also doesn't really seem like the sort that would actually devote his time to helping a gang of good guy gods with realpolitik, on account of the fact that he's a weird schizoid.