[@LokiLeo789] for Anu
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This sheet's well done. It's probably our favorite one of yours yet! (That's saying something considering how many you've given us... :lol)

Clear and strong portfolio, appearance, and ambitions. It will be quite easy to find things to do with a character and having a tyrant or ten will certainly keep things interesting and round out the cast.

This nugget came up in our talk, and you might want to consider it:

[quote=BB]Perhaps my one critique is Anu's nigh-perfect control over his emotions, which seems to be a common theme in all of Loki's characters. This is thematically appropriate, but personally I think this would be a brilliant place to put a flaw. Perhaps his control over his emotions is not as perfect as he likes. Likely Anu will seek to enhance his control over his emotions. I believe this would make a nice path for character development.[/quote]

Regardless of whether or not you do that, Anu looks pretty good. One thing is still left up in the air though, and that's what you intended for Anu's origins and parents. You seem to allude to Shengshi + Narzhak but that pairing is only implied, there's nothing about exactly how Anu is born, and in general we want to see something more concrete.

Sort out the parentage and then Anu is accepted.
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[@Zurajai] for Roog
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The parentage part is good. I'm glad that it's clearly established in your sheet.

The portfolio certainly has potential because it fills a niche and immediately puts Roog into a place where he has a purpose as well as some natural adversaries and opposing forces. Problems arise from the proposed portfolio description, though. Mutton and BBeast both feel that it's too nebulous. While I think that your description sets the mood and theme of the character, one can read through it and still be left wondering what exactly Roog [i]does[/i]. What exact sort of powers do you envision Demise as conferring? The ability for Roog's teeth and claws to sink into a soul as easily as flesh and wrench it out of a body? Give us some examples and stuff.

It's also worth thinking about whether Roog will be involved into this whole soul debate and life-death cycle, and if so, where he fits into it. It's worth familiarizing yourself with the ongoing soul heist and the plotting that's going on against Katharsos.

Beyond that it's good that he doesn't just kill because murder is fun, and that there's some grey and nuance to him. The persona has potential for good interactions and writings too.

By far the strongest part about your sheet is the appearance and how well you tied theme and parentage into that. We all thought that was very well done.

There were a few sage observations that I'll just quote.

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I will comment that denoting other characters by descriptors rather than their actual names can be potentially confusing and rather challenging to do consistently. I tried to do it with Ashalla and gave up rather quickly. Just a heads up

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It is worth asking what Roog will be doing short-term and long-term. Roog has a duty, and that is to inflict death upon the dying, but that alone does not make for much of a story. I do think that Roog is capable of finding more to do and that he hasn't been written to be locked into one task, which is good, although I'd like Zurajai to ponder a bit more on what he'd like to do with Roog. Not necessarily put it into the sheet, but ponder it at least.[/quote]

You're pretty close to getting there. Just make a few changes and give us a bit more, and we'll be able to approve the sheet. Not yet, though.
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