[@Roman] 

As requested in the Discord. This is for your first post.

Alrighty, so, the first thing that stands out to me is your exposition. While there are some syntax errors here and there, it's pretty minor and doesn't detract from the writing all that much. Overall, I really enjoy your exposition, and I can see and appreciate how you're using it to explore's Matt's world through his senses. Well done on that regard. 

I do think, though, that you need to work on dividing your paragraphs. There are a handful throughout this post that are too long and verge on blocks of text. Both in exposition and dialogue - the latter primarily when Karen is debriefing Matt. Just simply finding a natural break point and separating them would help keep your writing nice and fluid, and would only enhance your use of exposition.

Speaking of dialogue, while I think Matt's initial voice isn't quite there, I'm sure you find a better footing in that regard later on. Right now it just feels, not bland, but neutral to me. If that makes sense. However, I absolutely love your Foggy. I can tell you're modeling him after the Netflix series, and I can absolutely hear Elden Henson's voice as I read his lines. My favorite part of your post, actually. Your voice for Matt is also improved here, I feel. When you write him with Foggy he seems to come more alive. 

Honestly, I debated giving your post a like when I initially read it last week. I can't quite recall why I didn't. I think, perhaps, Matt's initial dialogue. Or maybe I was just being petty and sticking to the joke that I hate you (I don't). Either way, that's been rectified now.

Looking forward to reading the rest of your stuff for this season.