Ok I will look over the edits when I am feeling a little more ambitious later, and see about grammar. The lack of names and specifics has a lot to do with being unsure of how much creative license I should take with the setting, while the gaps in details are indicative of crunching years of time into a few paragraphs and not wanting to overload the profile. So when I revisit it I will do so from the position that you have invited me to provide some of those details.