Problems the grammar in appearance section has.

First sentence in the second paragraph of Master Voryla Sisk’s report on Force abilities doesn’t quite make sense. Possibly a misplaced comma?
[quote]In my recent mission on Coruscant searching the lower districts for information, we could recover Airus displayed several skills that impressed me, first as a Miraluka and no doubt thanks to the tutelage of his fellow Consulars he displayed much better control of his force sight allowing us to avoid danger on our way to the lower levels.[/quote]

[u]Concerning Master Turus’ report on changes after his promotion and the sacking of Coruscant:[/u]
In this era, as a time of war, all Jedi are trained in some level of combat, though some of course train more or less than others. The way that is phrased seems like you mean virtually no consular-type Jedi focus on lightsaber use. Might be better to instead have it as his degree of saber-combat focus is unusual for those training to become lorekeepers.

[u]In Master Turus’ report on field performance:[/u]
Jarkai ⇒ Jar’Kai


For the sith who slew his master, we can offer up Darth Theya as a candidate, though it probably should remain unknown for now. Just a thought.

We do note one tendency in the reports… you’ve got quite a lot of Jedi Masters there, yet no Jedi Knights. It is a bit unusual for a single Jedi to be primarily trained by numerous different Jedi Masters over extended periods of time. We’d recommend spicing it up with some Knights (possibly with specializations). 

The reports also tend to only praise him highly. None seem to point out failures (even ones that are overcome)


The biggest issue we have is simple: If he was on Coruscant during the Sacking, he’d either be dead, captured by the Sith and turned/killed. They pretty much scoured the place during the sacking. Since he obviously hasn’t been a captive, that would generally mean he wasn’t on Coruscant during the Sacking.

Unless by abandoned you mean ran right at the start of the attack before anyone knew the scale of it, found a way out through the bowels of the temple ziggurat and hid in the deeper levels of Coruscant during the occupation? That level of cowardice would generally fall in under being a pretty major flaw.



Even if a Council doesn’t feel he is ready for taking on a padawan, he might be used to assist in training on the side, especially with skills he is talented at.


Question: 
You’ve specified that he entered the order in around infancy. What age do you imagine him having been knighted?
A typical padawan training period is 6-10 years, and most are initiates until they’re 12-14 years old.


Fix up the above stuff (and perhaps look at searching for other minor grammar flaws if you so desire) and we can look at the sheet again. We see great potential in this sheet. The numerous reports from different Jedi does give it a fairly unique flavor, which is a definite bonus.