Alright, I've updated to address some of those concerns, but I strongly disagree with the rationale for others as I'll explain below in the summary of changes made. I'm keeping him as a Darth while making other adjustments.


Age bumped up ten years to 56 and altered places where age was specifically noted to match. I'm still having him picked up at ~12 years old since the exact time of Ruuria being taken over by a Sith puppet government was uncertain anyway and the info in the wiki implies it could have started as early as ~3700 BBY anyway.

Info in the bio and interests portions expanded and clarified to note that the training under Darth Korrus was a holistic approach to combat training, not a matter of training things one by one. Frankly the idea that time required for mastery of a set of skills ought to be counted sequentially rather than concurrently makes no sense to me, because that's not how learning works in reality. A quick look at the curriculum of any school from the elementary to post-graduate level would show students learning multiple things in the same time frame. Even so, I've knocked down the power level of a lot of things make his prowess with the Force less intense.

Force Speed and Force Lightning down to well-trained talent from talented master.
Droid Disable down to trained talent from talented master.
Force Sense down to intermediate training from well-trained talent.
Telekinesis, Force Throw, and Force Choke down to intermediate training from advanced training.
Telepathy down to basic training from intermediate training.

This leaves 2 mastered talents (Precognition and Force Rage). It also leaves 6 as well-trained talents: Force Speed, Force Sight, Force Bellow, Force Scream, Force Lightning, and Chain Lightning, though I'd argue that the bellow at least is actually just a side effect of training up the scream rather than something that was specifically focused on. There are only two at advanced training now, Telekinetic Defense and Force Stun. All of these things are directly relevant to combat, long with the lightsaber skills, so they were all being trained in tandem by the holistic practical approach rather than in a one by one fashion.

The political influence and associates section was greatly expanded, and the bio has additions to note this as well. Of major note, he now has a whole fleet of subordinates rather than me hand-waving them away as all unimportant stooges shunted off to military postings.

Expanded the flaws section a lot as well.

Added some more failures and changed up the punishments explained in the bio.

General tweaks to the bio, lots of additions, but the basic thrust of the narrative is the same.