Grammar can be worked on, but I think it's the story, TY [hider=Cpt Adam Exodus] [b]How long do you usually write?[/b] • One paragraph or less • [u]One to two paragraphs[/u] • Several paragraphs [b] Do you enjoy writing collaborative posts for things like conversations, combat, etc.? [/b] Yes. [b] Is grammar and depth of writing important to you? [/b] Yes. [b] Are there any writing subjects you particularly enjoy exploring? [/b] I’m one to at least ask about a topic that catches my eye. [b] Is there anything you [i]really[/i] dislike and want to avoid like the plague? [/b] No. I feel like I am among good people. [b] Is there something you are uncomfortable with happening to your character? [/b] Leave the dude alone. lol [b] Do you have any short-term or long-term goals with this character? [/b] I do not know right now. [/hider] [hider=Imperial personnel files] [b] Name: [/b]Adam Exodus [b] Species: [/b]Human [b] Pureblood percentage: [/b]Less than %2 [b] Homeworld: [/b]Coruscant [b] Age: [/b]30 [b] Gender: [/b]Male [b] Military Branch: [/b]Imperial Army [b] Rank: [/b]Captain [b] Unit/designation: [/b]150th Combat Group [b] Role/specialisation: [/b]Officer Finishing School, familiar with field manuals but has recently ascertained field leadership role [b] Current place of Service: [/b]Cpt. Exodus practices defensive and offensive tactics for a few weeks at a time. He transports from terrain to terrain [b] Sphere of influence: [/b]Captain Exodus has the marks in order to lead a platoon. [/hider] [hider=Imperial Intelligence Reports] [h3][sub]Detailed appearance. Imagery insufficient.[/sub][/h3] Exodus is incredibly fit and functions optimally under overwhelming efforts against him. He curls his biceps, triceps, and his legs and his core body. Also, he uses certain hot water bathing techniques, and resistance training. His cardio used to be premiere, but given the opportunity to command in the field over the past year, he focuses on being flexible and strong. His eyes are deep, and navy blue. His hair is brown and kept up. He likes his hair trimmed down to the scalp, though he keeps a little hair on top of his head. He thinks his complexion put together with his eyes and slack hair gives him a good grin. [h3][sub]Report on skills and talents, including level of skill[/sub][/h3] Cpt. Exodus is a veteran to skirmishes between worlds of thought, basically being a hardened militiaman. He can lift 200lbs. more than his body weight. His special training includes sniping, trail recovery, advanced communication device assembly, sharpshooting, entitlement, jet controlled machinery, electrical and mechanical engineering, etc. [h3][sub]Report on known combat experience, training and weapons training.[/sub][/h3] There was an encounter between his unit and another that was over a search and destroy episode that was due to espionage. The unit that was against Cpt. Exodus had staged an evade tactic, only to incorporate that same training Cpt. Exodus and his men knew. An ambush occurred and the twenty man group was cut in half. But, Cpt. Exodus followed after waiting for the saboteurs to move away. He regrouped his command and journeyed out to kill the other militiamen. The contest ended with more than a combined loss of eight troopers, and one NCO. In the field, where the two teams had pursued one another carefully but within the lines of duty as trained soldiers, three different gun fights took place. On the third and final battle, Cpt. Exodus recommended available artillery. They tossed mortars and grenades at the enemy while charging to a checkpoint before they attacked. This was the final shot, but his Sargent was KIA after making it so long in the biggest battle Exodus had took a place in. [h3][sub]Report on role, specialization and responsibilities pertaining to the subject’s military deployment.[/sub][/h3] Cpt. Exodus role is to command up to five squads of killers on multiple terrain environments. He knows to look for things like scents or path, optimized by field equipment including the use of things like infrared GPS, tracer weapons, and concussion grenades. His responsibilities mean to keep himself, his soldiers alive, knowing how to prevent farther loss, and interacting with the environment. [h3][sub]Detailed notes on political influence and associates. [/sub][/h3] Captain Exodus has mingled with people and associates that could have used his advice in one manner or another. He does not think politics are a premiere part of his life… unless they’re on the battlefield, and involve guns and dead bodies. [h3][sub]Detailed notes on known rivals and enemies, outside and within the Empire.[/sub][/h3] He does not have information about enemies, however he will fistfight any body that occasionally happens over any thing as miniscule as a woman, or a challenge from a fellow officer. He does not take killing people personally. Most of his enemies are either in jail, on the run, or dead. [h3][sub]List and description of other known associates, including subordinates.[/sub][/h3] Lt. Zebra thinks his CO is good for the stuff of war. The two go over every recruit’s day to day operation success/fail charts, grading more than forty or fifty men. It is a trooper by trooper basis. But, Zebra and Exodus share common well-being, major concerns, exercise, subordinate appraisal, etc. [h3][sub]List of known all ownerships, including vessels, non-standard equipment, slaves and locations.[/sub][/h3] None in particular. Cpt. Exodus is from Coruscant, and longs for the battle now with standard equipment and transportation, but one day he wishes to retire and go back home. [h3][sub]Psychological evaluation of candidate.[/sub][/h3] A synopsis of Adam Exodus determines that former evaluation of the Captain was accurate. He does suffer from surgery that was administered to his neck following field battle. He responds to criticism standardly. There is no evidence of drug use. His speech is not affected, or pressured. His regular exercise is above average. He thinks forward, calling on himself to be better than others. He does have tremor, but it is mild. No depression r suicidal thoughts/actions. He is single, and has no record of domestic, spousal, or homosexual behavior. This is synoptic. [h3][sub]List and description of known and suspected flaws. To be put into restricted database.[/sub][/h3] Captain Adam Exodus has two particular scars, but no tattoo. There is a dent in his neck where he was penetrated with a knife. There other is in his right hand on the bottom web of his middle finger where he lost in a game of chance. [h3][sub]known interests of the candidate.[/sub][/h3] He likes music, but does not let it or any thing else distract from his alert manner. [h3][sub]Major achievements on record.[/sub][/h3] Exodus found himself alone on the side of the dirt walk. He had been stabbed in the neck, and he felt. However, there was another guy lying not far from him and his blood loss was twice as much. He had no clothes, so he carried the hurt man to the nearest occupied building and arranged assistance. The people in the building gave him some pants. [h3][sub]Major failures on record. Confidential.[/sub][/h3] The most notoriously bad he ever got pinned on was when he attacked a woman in a bar. The woman had been his girlfriend, so she recorded to the police it wasn't anything but a tiny fight. Adam agreed and they went home that night. He was young ten, but he did not want that to ever happen again. It haunted him from night sweat to small tremor, and that is because his parents had split one time and his stepfather had hit him and his mother. [/hider] [hider=Interview] [h3][sub]Personal biography, as detailed by the subject for use in imperial archives. Acquired shortly after last achievement of note.[/sub][/h3] Adam was headstrong with a good family that offered him love, kindness, and a home with tutelage so he would become a man and secure himself with his own stable, loving family one day. Adam’s was taught to balance studying and to playing, His academics in the engineering field were excellent, applied mathematics or not. One day, his mother and father surprised him very ultimately… they found a light saber and decided to give it to him. They showed how lethal it could be when they sliced through an old concrete block. He said he would be careful, but asked if weapon belonged to a Jedi midget. He was informed that it was a youngling’s. Fight training was in open enrollment at the local exercise outlet not too long after he was bestowed the gift. He was accepted, and also agreed to help some of the student aged participants with their homework. He practiced a mixture of combat and wrestling forms and holds. It took up most of his free time, but a lot of days he spent tutoring the kids. So, he was packing up to get home and flew out the door when some dirty man stopped him. He told him that he had witness his tiny level of light sabering use and knowledge. Then, the bum asked him if he wanted to trade a few blasters for his sword. Adam was not eager right away, but a few days later he met the man hanging out along the path to his house and he stepped up to him to ask if he could try a pistol. And, he fell in love. The old man walked away with a light saber and a couple of snacks and water. Adam packed up his new equipment, and toted it home. His parents scolded him. They said no one would ever trade something as valuable as a light saber. But, he contested that the deal was conceived enough that he was able to try out all of the weapons, and that they were just as worth as much as the sword. They would love the weapons over the time. Like their son would. It was nearing their end of school, and every one was excited. Adam achieved several achievements for science and mathematics, and was allowed to speak at the assembly. He spoke briefly, and encouraged that no matter how old or young you were, or what you could or could not do, that the whole world needed you for something. It was a happy time for Adam, and he started working instead of enrolling in college. While he was working at a cantina, two Imperial recruiters entered. He had dreamed of it. Ever since he traded the light saber for the blasters, that he would rather be a commando instead of empty-headed Force users. So, when the waitress walked by him he grabbed her and asked what the two military heads ordered and that he would serve them. After Exodus and they talked, they said he was a shoe-in. They explained camaraderie and benefits and money. A week later, after a few phone calls to check him out, they were at his door step. It took a few visits to negotiate a contract but it was finished. Three weeks again, and was he flying in a ship heading in the direction that he wandered if would be his final location. His first post was Intelligence analysis. He gathered some minor clues, backed up information circuits, translated languages, and etc. He was interesting, but it was not what the kid storm trooper envisioned. He took a leap of fate, and applied for a commissioned rank. He did not attend college, but he had to make the minimum score to compete in Officer School. It would take two months, but finally he received a noticed granting him admission into Murder Camp. The indoctrination was remotely easy. It was a lot of field manual essays and reciting codes. Next, was nothing but exercise… and, then more essays and recitals. The third phase included detection and evasion, and more exercise. The fourth phase assembling and handling guns. The fifth phase was the students going on about every thing they had gained. After that, he was given a four-day pass. When he showed up for the sixth installment, he found himself obligated to go on a fifteen day excursion. And, so, he did. The new Lieutenants that were graduated for the honor of being called Commanders. They stood proud inside of a large field, inducted in a glorious ceremony. After what he endured, Adam had thought it was not right because he did not attend school. They put him at figuring out oil equations. He did so for half a year, but it had to be stroped. Lieutenant Adam Exodus got his first squad, and he did not look back. [/hider]