[@Schylerwalker] Hrm, I just read your post.

I like it, it's a well written post for sure and it does a good job of conveying what your people are like. But it feels like that the feeling of childish curiosity and that sudden, but faint realization of self and time are palyed off in favor of divine enlightenment. One particular part I thought was perhaps over the top was this:

[quote]"The Leader gathered many of the shells and bones. Her followers watched in awe as she showed them how to make bowls and plates from which to eat their food, and utensils to lift it."[/quote]

Where did she learn that? Same with the fire scene, seemingly without any rhyme or reason, she just [i]knows[/i] how to make fire. While yes, I do not mind people doing what people do, I just feel like both of these scenes were a lot more about a sudden rush of knowledge, rather than a rise of interest, a trial and error route at the end of which they did either. I can iamgine them using large leaves as a bowl/palte to keep clean, but not making bowls and utensils without any previous knowledge, just out of the blue.

Like I said, I feel like it doesn't capture what the other posts have, but I might be wrong. I want to know what the others think about it and whether or not I'm a hardass about this, because I do want all of us to have a great time, just not by sacrificing reason. But if everybody is oaky with it, then I have no cmplaints. Not that it gives you any advantage over the others, I just feel like a subtle change in context might do good for the post ^^