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[quote]For a moment when reading the sheet, I thought that Yse was the only child, but then in the last two paragraphs we hear about Yaric her brother - I think he should be bumped up to the top so it's not as jarring. (Unless I'm just blind and missed it!)[/quote]
[quote]This afforded Ambnean and his wife, Safila, the boon of a large family.[/quote]
I will take some of these notes into consideration with my next revision, for sure. I can definitely elaborate and explain things a bit better!