[quote]His looks is athletic and lithe [...] His hair, brownish black, lays to one side naturally[/quote]
His looks are - His hair lies.

[quote]At his hip, an impressive sabre rests in a sheathe. It is decorated with silver inlay and the blade has been made with a cortosis weave, with the pommel and handguard made to curl around the hand in a half basket.[/quote]
Seems a bit of an extravagant affectation. This isn't WH 40K. I'm willing to go 'sure' if a second GM agrees.

[quote]capitol[/quote]
Capital

[quote]Captain Harvester has been, as of yet been unable to reverse the effects of the assignment on his career.[/quote]
Jumbled sentence. Check tenses and structure.

[quote]Alcohol abuse[/quote]
Is he a drunk or does he occasionally partake?

[quote]Captain Harvester has few documented interests, however of those few are painting.[/quote]
That clause needs to be rephrased.

[quote] At the time, despite relatively light experience in command, Captain Harvester demonstrated his skill of command by engaging and defeating a small flotilla of pirates, despite the Intrepid having taken severe damage and being alone in the engagement. [...]While other officers of the fleet he had been assigned to suffered heavy casualties during an attack, Captain Harvester quickly adapted to the situation and attacked the rebel flagship. The rebels were not expecting the maneuver and the flagship was able to be boarded and taken quickly, the rest of the enemy fleet able to be quickly destroyed following the action and chaos among the rebel ranks.[/quote]
These sentences are needlessly long and therefore difficult to understand. Chop them up.

[quote]A failed assault on a rebelling moon lead to...[/quote]
lead --> led (and again in the interview)

[quote]professors[/quote]
professors --> professor's

[quote]It wasn’t anything to fantastic[/quote]
to --> too

[quote]Interviewer: But you survived? How?

Cpt. Harvester: I had been thrown behind a command console by the initial impact. I hit the body of another officer who cushioned me. He survived, I didn’t.[/quote]
That would mean Agent Colfac is interviewing a ghost.

[quote]It is a petty squabble that came about from a mistake I made. Nothing more. [/quote]
What mistake? What squabble? What are your plans with this? I have the feeling you want to explain through RP. Is that correct?