[quote=@Reflection]
[@Parallel Hearts] I mean, sure? Like if a servant ran in and stabbed one, that's like an obvious win for a servant. If they ran into a room where fifty of them are running about and had time to prep, that might be another thing altogether. They're a strengths in numbers kinda thing.

A C rank familiar cannot beat a servant in 1v1, but 1v50? Sure. 
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Well, if that's the case he's ok.

[quote=@Crusader Lord]
Well, i did kinda call Archer way back in the interest check, and noted i was making one, but i suppose this is how it is now. Alas. 

We do have too many people here to split among 7 servants, however, so someone is going to be cut out in the end i think? Did we have someone join out of the blue, perhaps, that imbalanced the numbers? Trying to figure things out before i head to work in about an hour, because at work i won't be around to finish any apps today unfortunately. (@_@)
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Apologies for that, but I really couldn't come to a better solution to deal with the number of players. Especially since calls on the Interest Check don't exactly equate to actual characters in the RP.

However, there are still possible positions, I guess.

I hope you can understand where I'm coming from. Furthermore, as said on the 1st post, you all will have the chance of swapping characters eventually.

[quote=@Sosuke]
I won't be making a Master, as to allow more people access to this RP. 

Also, are we going to be making a Discord for quick communication?

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I don't intend to do a Discord for this story, since I'm not particularly good with that and I prefer to make any important announcements here anywhere, where they'll logged and easily accessible.

Anyway, regarding your characters:

I cannot accept that 1st one for some reasons, other than just the Unified Language. That in itself wouldn't be a problem but other things, especially the Parameter stealing in his 1st skill are concerning. The extra damage against Kings is no problem, but stealing Parameters, especially END, with a single non-Noble Phantasm attack is.

For the second idea, she's pretty much ok, with a few points needing attention.

1st - Her 1st Noble Phantasm should work like all similar ones in canon and be deactivated when she needs to use her second one. You can summon the mount without giving away her identity, but when she uses the charge attack (which requires calling the Noble Phantasm's name), her identity must be given away like any other Servant using a Noble Phantasm.

2nd - Make it so that she and her mount lose much of the benefits of that Presence Concealment-like effect when they prepare to attack, not when they are about to hit with an attack so that it's in line with all other canon stealth effects.