First round of reviews. 


[@Leotamer]
[hider=Sirius]
NF: I think this portfolio is unconventional but interesting. I’m a bit iffy on the connection between Hope and Stars, so I am setting the following condition: Sirius can only spend DP on hope-related actions when the stars are visible, otherwise he will have to spend MP. That said, DP actions he takes while the stars are out can still remain in effect after the stars are gone.

Capy: ✔️ I am still not fully 100% sure about the unlimited potential stars have to get just any port under it, but at the same time I think it's part of what goes with being a conceptual god, the links between port and domain are less clear. That said, I would place the manipulation of the material of the stars as a cosmic domain, and suggest Leo to go for it as his second domain.
Personality wise it seems good enough, pretty the archetypical neutral good style character in Divinus. Realm, Domains and avatar seems fine to me. 	

Zee; Minor Nitpicks.
‘he can bless people to see ‘prefectly’ > perfectly. 
He can ‘imbued’ materials > imbue
which points to ‘   ‘ heart's desire > The
Followers of Sirius have greater mental protection, [b]but for all but his greatest champions,[/b] it pales in comparison to the innate power of avatars. > Bolded section sound weird, I get what you are trying to say, but it could be clarified further.
and delegetion to attempt to better the world. > delegation

There are more spelling errors, but I would say that Ceres would benefit more from having an Artifact as a Hammer, instead of just starting with one. As long as this is understood, that the hammer is not an artifact, until it becomes one, we are good.

Until the spelling errors are corrected, application denied. 

I’m just kidding, accepted, but please work on those errors.

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[@Not Fishing]
[hider=Cadien]
Zee: An interesting character to add to the cast. Perfection and Glamour as a combo seems fairly thematic, and both showcase Cadien’s attempt to achieve true perfection. Personality, realm and forms seems fine to me. Avatar is functional. You also have a plan for more ports, which is always a good thing to see. I don’t really have any other comments.

Capy: ✔️ Domain and portfolio seems fine and the description gives me a good idea of what he is going for. One advice I’d give is to also move Glamour a bit into magical properties too to make it more flexible? Persona is common to that of a perfection god, but I feel the self-improvement angle and soldiering on is enough to make the character very unique and cool. His avatar is cool.

Accepted.

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[@Commodore]
[hider=Thaa]
NF: I am personally fine with this. Everything in his CS seems to fall in line with what we have established. My only concern is whether or not he will be able to find three portfolios for his domain.

Capy: ✔️ If he has made clear he can handle it all, not reduce to isolationism and being at odds with the entire pantheon and that he knows where he will expand towards then I have no objections. Historically all death gods have dropped in the early times of Divinus RPs, so here is hope Thaa will move away from the typical issues and stand above them. The avatar is cool and feels like a guardian of the underworld, the realm seems fine, obviously.

Zee; Thaa is a well thought out character with the clear goal of possessing the dead. Afterlife is a unique portfolio that goes well with the dead. It allows for interaction between Thaa and other gods who wish to have souls/dead, which is always a good thing. Realm. Persona, forms, and Avatar are all constructed in a careful manner. Having talked with Commy about his future ports, I am confident in saying he will add a fine addition to the cast. 

Accepted.

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[@Double Capybara]
[hider=Qullqiya]
NF: Everything seems to be fine. There are no real issues, and everything positive I have to say more or less echoes what I have previously said.

Zee: Besides some minor spelling errors, the application is very good. Supernatural and darkness make a fine combo, and are thematic. I have no doubt Cappy has plans to branch out even further. Persona is sweet, forms are good, and the avatar is ‘human’. 

Accepted. 

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