As always... [hider=My Review in Blue] [img]https://66.media.tumblr.com/eee4a5405a796cbb080b1923bb903479/f8901cb4b2713b74-87/s1280x1920/8ca89d46636be1b0a163e56ac8a7e1c51cbbcb4f.jpg[/img] [color=D1FF00][b]Name:[/b][/color] Luke [color=D1FF00][b]Age:[/b][/color] 20? [color=cyan]This has gone beyond a running theme and become a running gag now.[/color] [color=D1FF00][b]Guild Mark Location:[/b][/color] Right on the neck [color=D1FF00][b]Magic Type:[/b][/color] [i]Adaption Magic[/i] - A magic unique to Luke as far as he knows that allows him to modify his body. Right now, he can only modify himself and nothing else. [color=cyan]Off the bat I have to say this is pretty open-ended and vague, we're gonna need just a bit more specifics to disperse confusion here.[/color] [color=D1FF00][b]Spells:[/b][/color] [hider=Spells]Configurate: The user streamlines their body for the current task at hand, such as increasing physical strength, durability, or speed. [color=cyan]This is definitely very vague. I take it that this is a buffing spell based on the examples given but its worded as if it can do more. I don't think it should do more than just apply self-buffs, and I also think the buffs should be described a little better. How significant are the buffs? How long do they last?[/color] Conditional Variance: The user forces magic through their body to change their structural makeup, temporarily giving them the ability to gain resistances to certain spells, such as fire or binding. [color=cyan]So this alters Luke's genetic makeup to allow him to resist specific spells, yeah? I can see that working for a wide variety of spells but surely there isn't an answer to everything. If its changing his phase of matter to allow escape from binding moves then that makes this spell pretty powerful. Power should come at a cost. Also can these resistances stack? Like for instance if he uses this spell to resist a fire attack, then uses it again to resist an ice attack, would the fire resistance be overwritten or would it still apply for a set duration?[/color] Ouroboros: A continuous spell that keeps on going without end. It finds the imperfections in Luke's body and smooths them out making him stronger and stronger. It's an extremely slow-acting spell that doesn't contribute in fights at all, yet it's uncontrollable. [color=cyan]I have no problems with this as a concept but I'm a little confused. Does this progressively heal him as well since it finds imperfections? What would be the "end result" this spell works towards?[/color] Operation Awakening: Expend nearly all of remaining magic to instantly recover from fatal wounds, though leaving the user in a state of exhaustion. It appears as black wriggling tendrils pouring out of his wounds and covering his body like a cocoon, which reveals an uninjured body. [color=cyan]This is the most straightforward spell lol. Would it still recover from fatal wounds if Luke is low on magic when he uses this spell? I believe its efficacy should scale with how much magic he puts into it, with the less magic he has meaning the less healing he gets from it. So perhaps at low magic, like after a fight, it would heal him enough to keep him alive but still not enough to remotely be back in fighting shape.[/color][/hider] [color=D1FF00][b]Magic Rank:[/b][/color] A [color=D1FF00][b]Equipment:[/b][/color] None [color=D1FF00][b]Strengths:[/b][/color] [list] [*] High Physical Capabilities: Luke is naturally strong, durable, and light on his feet. Combine this with his magic, and those already high capabilities skyrocket. [*] Large Magic Container: Luke's capacity for storing Ethernano is larger than most magicians, which gives him a good amount of magical stamina. [*] Resolute: Once Luke sets off on something, he's staunchly determined to carry it through. Contrary to his countenance, his willpower is strong.[/list] [color=D1FF00][b]Weaknesses:[/b][/color] [list] [*] Zero Martial Skill: Even with his strong body, Luke is clueless on how to use it correctly. His fighting skills are practically nonexistent due to his dependence on his natural physical capabilities. [*] Gullible: Luke's skill at seeing through deception is low, thus he tends to usually believe what even a stranger may tell him. [*] Unfocused: Luke has the nature of a airhead and it's somewhat difficult for him to keep his thoughts straight. This is also why he may talk slow at times. This also means his strategic ability is low. [color=cyan]The inner machinations of my mind are an enigma.[/color][/list] [color=D1FF00][b]Personality:[/b][/color] Luke is a quiet and gentle person who would be the last person to pick a fight. He's somewhat slow on the uptake and seems to lack any semblance of what a person could call common sense. He's also quite the forgetful person. The strange part about him is that he just doesn't get angry ever. It's almost like he lost that emotion entirely. Actually, most of his emotions are dull and somewhat muted. Because of that, he can take on the role of a mediator. [color=cyan]Personally I'd think him being slow and lacking common sense would disqualify him from being a mediator lmao[/color] [color=D1FF00][b]History/Bio:[/b][/color] Luke's earliest memory is him stumbling around in a city. He was a textbook amnesiac without a single memory of who he was [color=cyan]actually textbook amnesiacs in real life have plenty of memories in the majority of cases, I've got a textbook for proof on my bookshelf[/color]. That's most likely the reason behind him being mentally slow. Looking at his reflection in a puddle, he could only assume he was a young adult. It was easy to just say he was 20-years-old. He was almost like a newborn lacking any incentive to do anything, so he meandered about for a couple hours until he found some individuals menacing a pair of kids. He stepped in, which caused them to walk away due to their desire to not cause a scene. Because of that act of helping people being the first desire that he acted upon, he decided to take on odd jobs. It was around this time that he discovered the type of magic he wielded. Like a curious child, he messed around with it for a bit before some mages saw what he was doing and recommended him to join a guild. He followed them and joined a guild with a corporate-like aura about it. His first job was a mess [color=cyan]just like in the real world[/color]. The mission was to clear out a cave so a town could use it as a mine, which sounded simple enough. He got lost and arrived at the site late and then he failed to fulfill the job because it would disturb the wildlife [color=cyan]also his magic wouldn't really suit this purpose lol[/color]. He was kicked out of the guild for that reason, but he didn't really feel anything towards that. He was swept in a current of joining guilds and getting kicked out for messing up a mission in an unacceptable manner. Some periods spent in guilds lasted longer than others. The journey of a man lacking memories lasted for 9 months before he found himself at Fenixtear [color=cyan]we accept all-comers[/color]. With 3 months clocked in as a guild member there, it's the longest he's stayed a member of a guild. It's also been a year since he found himself stumbling in the middle of a street. He still hasn't even come close to getting his memories back, but something did change from back then. Luke is now feeling a very small urge to at least try to reclaim his memories. He realizes he's in a shallow half-bake[color=cyan]d[/color] state; something that can't even be called a full human the way he is now [color=cyan]he doesn't know it but he's in good company to relate[/color]. He's curious about the person he was before. Was he a nice person or a terrible person? Was he strong or was he weak [color=cyan]probably strong[/color]? The urge is there, but it's still very small and building very slowly if not at all. He can comfortably say that even if he doesn't get even a single fragment of a memory back, he'll be just fine. [color=D1FF00][b]Extra:[/b][/color] Always wearing headphones with music playing out of them. [color=cyan]Bonus points for using this section.[/color] [color=cyan]I like the concept of an amnesiac regaining their memories and the opportunities that this can present (I read your PM), but I'm really held back by how vague his magic is presented. Open-ended magic is fine but I need a bit more specifics, lest I misinterpret his powers and it creates problems down the line. I'm gonna reserve my final verdict until you glow up the Magic and Spells sections some, though I will say that you're probably good to go once they get elaborated on. Also thank you for not turning us into Mermaid Heel.[/color] [/hider] [@Not Fungus]