Asterion here, under a new name. Here's a submission, tell me what you think?
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Status
Class: Saber
True Name: Ferdiad
Gender: Male
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
Attribute: Earth
Armament: Light Armor, Sword
Faction: Undetermined


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History: A warrior of Irish Legend, Ferdiad was one of two students trained by the warrior woman Scáthach, alongside Cú Chulainn. The two would become close friends, akin to brothers but would eventually part ways shortly after Cú Chulainn received the Gae Bolg.

During the War between Ulster and Connacht, Ferdiad would be bribed and blackmailed by Queen Medb to fight Cú Chulainn as her champion. The two friends would battle for several days, until Ferdiad was struck down by the Gae Bolg, dying in his friends arms.


Personality: Saber is generally a very laid-back individual, preferring not to get involved with things unless absolutely necessary. Rather easygoing, he can be called lazy at times, preferring to take things nice and slow, even refusing to do things he views as pointless or unneeded. He is very blunt, almost to a fault and won't hesitate to make his opinions known if he feels a mistake is being made.

Saber enjoys battling strong opponents, and views not giving one's all in combat as disrespectful and insulting to the enemy's skill and strength. He respects and values bravery, and would show mercy and kindness to willing to stand their ground against him despite their own weakness, not out of stupidity of misplaced pride, but determination to protect one's home & people, to stand up for their ideals and beliefs.

He dislikes the Prideful and Arrogant, the Selfish and the Greedy, attributing such attitudes to Medb who he blames for his death. He is disgusted by those who would involve innocents, and strives to protect them whenever he can. He enjoys traveling around the Modern World and seeing the various sights and experiences, not unlike a tourist
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[b]Parameters[/b]
Strength: B+
Endurance: B+
Agility: C+
Mana: C
Luck: E

[b]Class Skills[/b]
[i]Magic Resistance:[/i] C
(Cancels Spells with a Chant below Two Verses. Cannot defend against Magecraft on the level of High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals.)
[i]Riding:[/i] C
(Most vehicles and animals can be handled with above average skill.)

[b]Personal Skills[/b]
[i]Disengage:[/i] D
(The ability to withdraw from the midst of combat, and reset the battlefield and battle conditions. Saber is capable of quickly withdrawing from battle once a day, so long as his Agility is higher than his opponent's.)
[i]Bravery:[/i] B
(The ability to ignore mental interference, Saber is capable of disregarding any and all mental interference, including magical, when locked in combat.)
[i]Rune Mage raft:[/i] B
(A Skill allowing one to possess and utilize Norse Runes for the purposes of magecraft and simple combat. At the current rank, Saber is capable of using all 18 Norse Runes in various combinations to imitate the effects of other skills, albeit at a weaker state.)

[b]Noble Phantasm[/b]
[u][i]Thorn Iarainn[/i][/u]
[i](The Blood-Stained Rose that Never Wilts)[/i]
Rank: B
Type: Anti-Unit (Self)
Range: ~~
Targets: 1
Description: Saber's primary weapon, his sword, Thorn Iarainn, or "Iron Thorn". A weapon forged sometime after leaving Scáthach's tutelage, it was meant to be a counter to his Battle Brother's Gae Bolg, an Ultimate Shield for the Ultimate Spear. In its sealed form, it resembles a simple sword, dark blue in color, with a rose shaped guard. In this form it is nothing more than a simple blade.

When the Noble Phantasm's True Name is invoked by Saber, he plunges the blade into his heart as crimson veins of energy spread throughout his body, as it turns a dark, metallic color. In this second form, Saber resembles a living suit of armor, all black except for crimson veins that crisscross his body like glowing vines. His eyes are a solid, pale blue while his hair appears like glowing tendrils of bloody-red light.

Once activated, Saber's physical Parameters of Strength, Endurance, and Agility are all greatly enhanced, while any damage he suffers is reduced by half. However, this form possesses a single weakness: The center of his chest, where the blade pierced his heart is left vulnerable, a pulsing seed that spread it's roots throughout Saber's body, this spot has become his "Achilles Heel", with all that the title entails.

It should be noted, that activating this Noble Phantasm is NOT lethal towards Saber, and he can reform his sword and return to his base form whenever he or his Master wishes.

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Basically this, but the muscle is a dark grey, almost black color, the bone armor is a metallic iron color, the hair is long and glowing red while his eyes are a solid icy blue.
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