[@gummiecandies] Better, but it still needs a lot of work. You don't need to make it all one big paragraph to make it look longer/more detailed, you just need to fill out all fields of the sheet in order to make it acceptable. Take my character, Mottledpaw, for instance. [url=https://www.roleplayerguild.com/posts/5173105]You can find her under MistClan cats.[/url] I have one paragraph for personality, two for biography, which is more or less the minimum of what I expect from RPers. Your sheet should be as filled out as hers.