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[color=fff200]Appearance[/color]: [url=https://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/1/16/Portrait_of_Dominique_Lacordaire.jpg]Hart[/url]
[color=fff200]Name[/color]: Bailey Hart 
[color=fff200]Age[/color]: 32
[color=fff200]Race[/color]: Human.

[color=fff200]Personality[/color]: Bailey Hart has one defining characteristic and that he’s very nice. Anyone that meets him would quickly understand that Hart is a gentle person. There is also the fact that Hart has a big dislike for any kind of violence. “We’re civilized people, not thugs or criminals,” as commented by Hart himself. Hart is very egalitarian as well, seeing no other race as inferior or superior to each other. Bailey never likes to see others in pain and will seek out to heal or aid them in any way, if it is his enemy, “I am the child of the Mother, and all are equal under her eyes.”  

[color=fff200]Backstory[/color]: Bailey Hart, also known as Father Shepard, has no memory or knowledge of his own parents or where he was born. He only remembers being dropped off at the doorsteps of a small Iuduns church, called Eplon, belonging to the House of Paupers within the Dreisal district (known as the poorest area in the Lesser Kingdoms of Asgard.) Growing up within the Eplon Church, Hart was well taken care of, and more importantly was educated in the humanities, theology, and maths. A very rare and lucky person Hart was for such a privilege, given how poor Dreisal was. Not surprisingly, Bailey quickly gained a strong moral-compass rooted in egalitarianism because of his education and life in the Eplon Church, combined with the fact that the church was also a-part of the House of Paupers. Early on, around the age of 10, Hart was “gifted” the task of aiding book-keepers in handling inventory. For one reason or another - likely the fact that Hart developed a talent for logistical work over time - stayed at his post, promoted to higher positions over the course of his life. 

The Eplon Church did all forms of humanitarian efforts in the Dreisal district, and were a part of a bigger series of different churches that were affiliated with the House of Paupers. By the age of 23, Bailey Hart had his work cut out for him, managing the vast inventory of supply used for feeding, clothing, and aiding the poor. Humanitarian charity was the normal ordeal for the Eplon Church, and Hart was very happy. Bailey felt that he was doing Mother’s work, and his good deeds have gained Bailey Hart good reputation among his co-workers and wider district among many others, especially the poor. What else could Hart ask for in life? Well, of course, this is not the end of the man’s story. This is merely the start of it. Later in life, Hart relocated to the Tyberian port city, more or less to aid the urban poor and to explore the world a bit more. While in Tyber, Hart got wind of alleged corruption from the House of Paupers but never did any heavy research into the subject, too busy to do so. Co-siding, a new political ideology was getting massive popularity among the workers and urban poor called Socialism. At first, Hart became a simple detractor of it. Too radical for him to fully adopt, but as Hart spent more and more time with the poor and average worker, he became more understanding on why it was so popular, and soon became a decent supporter for Socialism because its values and beliefs aligned well with his Iuduns faith. 

Time went on and Hart became dissatisfied with the House, feeling that they were not really fixing any of the issues of poverty, and instead just provided short-term solutions. Not only that, Hart became sympathetic with the Tyberian cause, soon becoming quite the anti-imperialist and advocated for self-determination. Because of Hart’s association with politics and more so with a rising new radical ideology, Hart was forced out of the House of Paupers. Of course, Hart’s work is yet done. Hart started to stage peaceful protests against the occupation of Tyberia, along with advocating for workplace democracy, end to the wage system, free housing, and many more radical ideals for the time. Hart has, and still to this day, distaste for violence. Even when he joined the Iuduns Socialist Party (ISP), he was not keen to commit to a violent uprising. Hart was not as radicalized as some would think, but things might change his mind later down the line. Eitherway, Hart gained a senior position in the ISP as a-part of their logisticial division that manages inventory and transportation of goods. Never in his life would Hart think that he would be in politics, but that seems to be a falsehood. Hart soon became a public figure in advocating for Tyberian self-determination, Iuduns, and socialism all in one package. Hart never engulfed himself in any kind of violence, for he believes that it is below him to do so. He believes that a peaceful transfer of power can be done by non-violent means, and we’ll see how that turns out.

*Iuduns is a faith based on a woman, who’s name has been lost to time, instead is just called Mother. She is largely based on legend and myth as she is dated back some 20 centuries ago, and any detail on her is merely just guesswork with what text or lore there is. The basis of the faith is very egalitarian and sees power and wealth as absolute corrupting powers. Instead, a person can find true faith and spirit in the easing of pain of the suffering and aiding those less fortunate than you. If one stays true to that then one can ascend beyond and gain higher knowledge and understanding in the world from the acts of good. 

[color=fff200]Skills and Abilities[/color]: [color=f26522]Legendary Theology[/color] - “Faith is the strongest tool and weapon in the arsenal  of men and women. For when there is God on your side, there is nothing that you can’t do in pursuit of justice against evil. I have combed through almost every piece of text and lore in pursuit of unearthing the truth of Mother and the higher powers above. For I am the servant of Mother and her justice.” 

[color=f26522]Master Logistician[/color] - “My time in the Eplon Church and elsewhere has given me great talents in managing the transportation of goods and keeping stock of inventory, along with the proper protocols and procedures on how to properly handle issues and mistakes that might arise from the complex nature of moving bread from field to storage.”   

[color=f26522]Accomplished Politics[/color] - “For when the House of Paupers abandoned me, I felt betrayed. There, I understood that higher moral ideals did not appeal to them. I forged my own path, one infused with the faith of Mother and one with the ideals of a worker revolution.” 

[color=fff200]Equipment[/color]:
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Alright, so I'll start by saying this character is an improvement over the previous one. But it still has some of the same nagging issues that I had pointed last time.

 - First off, while I like pacifist characters, I feel that, given the theme of this RP, it doesn't make much logical sense for him to be kicking off the second Tyberian Revolution with the others. The enemy is hostile, and historically the Revolutionaries have risen up with violence to cast out tyrants in their city. As a pacifist, there is little this character can influence on the major set pieces of the story which are the Resistance Operations that the player group will undertake. These operations are, more often than not, violent in their intent. Bearing that in mind, this character would once again be sidelined for the high points of the RP. Pacifists do have a place in this world, just not really for the particular subject matter of this specific RP.

 - Having a logistician is also fine, though it once again is a role that would be better suited for an Ally/NPC. Given that there are some logistics in this RP, it does make sense to have a character with some knowledge on it. So that is a good thing in itself, but it does then step on the idea that the group should find ways to manage their resources by assuming authority over it. On that, resources and logistics should be compartmentalized and handled by the subject matter experts (i.e. manasmiths would know best what to do with mana crystals, gnomes would know best what to do with machinery, etc.). So taking agency as a logistician, when viewing it from that perspective, diminishes the role and might not offer a very wholesome experience for you. Additionally, it would also be a difficult thing to properly, and compellingly roleplay over a long term.

 - I'm honestly not too much of a fan of the political aspect. While sure, it'd make sense that a time of innovation also sees the birth of more modern political structures, it really doesn't have much of a place in the narrative of this RP. It was would be overshadowed and quite frankly, cast aside by much larger problems (going to avoid spoilers but the stakes are higher than one might think). Plus there is an intended end for this RP, and I'm really going to drive home the focus on the resistance and their attempts to liberate the city so there isn't much room to squeeze in additional politics beyond what is already in my plans.

Much of this could be mitigated in a change of some finer details in his personality. Perhaps he hates violence but views it as necessary when his idea of faith is obstructed by another power (such as Asgard). It would make him more zealous, and thus a bit more extreme in his religious faith in the way you originally wanted, while also making him less of a paperweight on the Resistance Operations. To expand on that. Perhaps he views the Asgardian's worshipping of the Zephyr as heretical and blasphemous, and that they've forfeited their right to live in the eyes of the Mother, and so Bailey acts on his authority as a Holy Father to execute them. Maybe while he was a Pauper Knight, he spent some time in the Warrior Caste, or possibly even just trained in it, so he knows how to fight, or at the very least defend himself. For Bailey's socialist political views, a simple line of text can be put in his personality to reflect his political stance, but it admittedly wont play a very important part in the overall story.

I definitely don't hate the character, and I want to point out that there are some aspects that I do really like. I love the idea of a religious zealot. I like characters who have a biased view of the world and its organizations as it makes a more believable character. I also really like the idea of a scholar who has read every bit of text to try and uncover more truth about his goddess. These are all things that I as the GM and architect of the story can use to involve your character a lot more. So I would definitely encourage you to stick with this character, only to change certain aspects to better fit the theme.