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@Psi Force
Still, I think that's a bit too much powers. You could try going with one power and taking a more intense weapon instead. Or something like that.
Switch Teleport+Electro BEEAAAAAAM+Vibe Check+super senses could work,but according to your description Vibration Power sounds strong enough alone.
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Edited it.
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Also what is electroportation?
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Basically teleportation. But it leaves behind an electrical current instead.
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Hmm.
Can she do it without any limits?
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No. She can't. It has a range of 20 metres radius.
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Hmmmm.
Add a limit to teleportation's use and electricity attacks' output and that'd be good.
Also the backstory might need some editting respectively.
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I understand. I'll try to keep it within reason.
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@AlternateMan I'm working on mine should be done editing in 10 to 20 minutes.
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Is there a time limit to the applications? I suddenly found another RP with a LOT of my old veteran buddies and would like to focus on character creation for that for a day or two before coming back to this one!
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If there is I am in trouble as well as I certainly won't have time to work on anything until the weekend.
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@AlternateMan I'm done now take a look.
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I didn't set a time limit for now, so don't worry about it.
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@AlternateMan Erm is my CS okay?
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@AlternateMan Bro! I finished the explanation.
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Patience my dude, I'm waiting for BC to come back so we can discuss.
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You might need more polishing with stuff to do. I understand that you want to do a dumb sword swinging anime girl, but that doesn't mean you don't need much details for the cs. The explanation for the implant could be viable, but it needs a lil bit of more sprinkling of detail.
If Yumi's dumber than a doorknob how did she enter the Sunderers(who, through normal means, requires at least a highschool student's level of intelligence)? Of all people, why was she selected for the surgery?
Why did her father try to fist fight a robot(unless he like downed a whole bar's load of beer)? And for the love of explosions why must she use the uwu speech?

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Alright. Here's an example 'hotfix' I could provide you. You can use it, or you can add more flesh on your cs, or find where I live and threaten me with an anime girl body pillow.

Yumi is still a dumb as a doorknob girl. But the loss of her father wasn't a real intense shonen style fistfight against an unbreakable enemy. It was a planned elimination, a covert operation to get themselves some free test subject. Pays less to assassinate some random dude than rightfully pay for a legitimate subject.
When Yumi had nobody to take care for her, a tech team approached her, offering help in exchange of a participation for their little project. They've uncovered some weird chip from a bunch of robots hiding out in an abandoned facility. So far they've only figured that it goes on a human being's brain, and they want to find out what it does.
Turns out, right after the surgery, that the implant was a device that taps onto your hormones and such- numbs the pain, lessens your muscles' restrains, all the good stuff. With a few things off-but that wasn't much of a problem. Yumi also went berserk as soon as she woke up, but hey, nobody of a high position died, so not bad.
Her sword(which was found with the chip, strangely) and a position in the newly recruited Sunderer initiates was the work of the head of the tech team, too.
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Edited it.
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Cool. Again, if you have any secrets planned, don't forget to dm me.
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