[b]hello I've been watching this thread because it seems super interesting. I will now bully DX3214 for his unforgivably persistent use of run-on sentences. I remember specifically talking him about reading what he wrote out loud a year or two ago, but now I can only hear him speaking with extreme quickness in his Brazilian accent unable to realize that it does not sound natural. :rollin Just to be crystal clear, I love you DX, and I hope this thread goes super far because there's a ton of potential here, some AMAZING writers, and I want to help you improve your faction and your writing so I hope this is helpful! [s]Please do not mind my snarky emoticons, I am merely expressing myself. [/s][/b] :drool [hider][quote=@DX3214] Prabog was once a prosperous world in the times of the confederation the first daughters of earth some called it a heavy industrial and technological world marked by its output and technological marvels thanks to its amazing minds philosophers and many others it wasn't made to last In the times of troubles of the confederation Prabog was thrown into anarchy initiated by a nuclear first strike who did it why is still a mystery this lead to a age of blood and war a time of warlords lasting for nearly a decade and a half ended by Alexander who forged the republic in his 30´s and launched a final war unifying half of the planet before dying arising to the position of hero and guardian of the nation After finishing the unification the republic now faces its greatest challenge rebuilding what was left by the events of the past but where some may simply settle and wait for better times, hope is now back on people's hearts as now the nation and its people wish to not only rebuild their homes but every world and reunite with mankind under a single flag As of right now the economy still lies in ruins and the politics grew divise due to the aim of ambitions and priorities in politics while the situation has been stabilized the armies now aid in the reconstruction of the cities and states something new compared to the times before where they just fought warlords this is now relied to pacification of regions that still are hold by rebels.[/quote] [b]ima go ahead and delete some extra stuff and literally re-write entire sections. I wrote this fairly late at night, so some sections might still be rough - sorry! I hope you like what I done to the place :dreamy[/b] Prabog was once a prosperous world in the times of the Confederation. Some of the first daughters of Earth called it a heavy industrial and technological world marked by its output and technological marvels, thanks to the amazing minds of their philosophers and to the tenacity of their industrial leadership. In times of trouble in the Confederation, Prabog was thrown into consternation and anarchy after a devestating nuclear strike. It is still a mystery to this day as to who had targeted them, and lead to an age of bloody war and death. It was a time of warlords lasting for nearly a decade and a half, which was ended by a single man named Alexander. He forged the Republic in his 30´s and launched a final war unifying half of the planet before dying a martyr and arising to the emblematic position of hero and guardian of the nation. After finishing the unification, the Republic now faced its greatest challenge: rebuilding what was left by the events of the past. Where some may simply settle and wait for better times, hope is now back on people's hearts as the nation. Its people wish to not only rebuild their homes, but every world and reunite mankind under a single flag. As of right now the economy still lies in ruins and the politics grew divisive due to the aim of ambitions and priorities in politics. While the situation has been stabilized, the armies now aid in the reconstruction of the cities. States face a new challenge compared to the times before where they just fought warlords - now they must rely on the pacification of regions that are still held by rebels. [quote=@DX3214] Resources The planet of Prabog is the world and capital of the republic while much of its natural beauty was destroyed many returned but many of its scars are still seeneble from space a world with nuclear craters radiation areas and ruins that can be seen from space. Major Industries The major industries that the planet had were heavy industrial and a Technological R&D one while this might lead to some benefits it still mainly ruins the types of heavy also influenced and aided in the times of warlords as seen below. Material Industry in the making of steel and other materials of utilization in construction and fabrication of objects something that still is maintained albeit diminished one of the heavy industries A former Industrial military complex while some may say it might bring good things it also brought bad as the industry itself and the remainders of it allowed the creation of extra weapons and way more deadly versions of the warlords of the planet still while half of the industry is in ruins some plants still exist also one of the heavy ones. Nuclear power and Nuclear mineral extraction different from other worlds has a rather large radioactive material deposit this aided in its powering but also its downfall due to its abilities to doom itself if needed be Technological are complicated since a mass difference exists in types of industry being then Robotics established during the industrial expansion of Prabog was robotics while it mainly derived towards its I.M.C it also allowed good luxuries to be made for the people something that ended with the industry nearly getting blown out to bits all that remained was in other lucky areas. Computer making was also part of the industry while considered heavy it also could be considered technological that was due to the rising tech industry in the planet on the pass this proved good in the making of domestic products and supplying itself to others now that majority of industry is in ruins and many people wish more for food it is not seen much as priority but still some factories remain AI research while the manufacturing of AI´s mainly remained for domestic services some advanced AI were made especially for the army and for domestic services as well while the existence of advanced AI gives some moral thoughts on what rights they shall have many were made before the fall of the planet many of which ended up going off world before the collapse while this industry almost disappeared the making of basic AI for robots is still a needed one.[/quote] The planet of Prabog is the world and capital of the Republic. While much of its natural beauty was destroyed, many returned to rebuild and revitalize the centerpiece of their empire. Many of its scars are still observable from space as a world with nuclear craters, sickly looking radiation areas, and despondent ruins. Major Industries The major industries that the planet had were heavy industry and technological R&D. Because both the hardware and software which was integral to these industries are in a dilapidated state, they are reliant on being refurbished and jerrybuilt into a workable state which is only a fraction of what it once was. However, many warlords took initiative to ensure that this technology was preserved and restored, meaning that renewal of the past is not entirely on the shoulders of the Republic. Material Industry in the refining of steel and other materials of utilization in construction and fabrication of objects something that still is maintained albeit diminished, especially in concerns to the heavy industries. Their former Industrial Military Complex, while providing the Republic with an abundance of skill and weapon power, conversely provided their enemy warlords with a wealth of highly skilled mercenaries who decided to sell their skills to the highest bidder. This caused many complications in the fights between the Republic and the warlords as issues arose, and even weapon or information transfers could be bribed to be misdirected to the rebel forces. There are still factories which produce military armaments which have been re-conquered, however some remain contested zones fraught with strife. Nuclear power and Nuclear mineral extraction differentiated from other worlds as they had a rather large radioactive material deposit. While in times of stability it was a true blessing in terms of a sustainable power source. Now they remain a heavy burden as highly advanced technology that requires specialized, customized equipment to function stands in the way of re-enabling these structures to what they once were. [s]Technological are complicated since a mass difference exists in types of industry being then[/s] [b]what :lol[/b] Robotics established during the industrial expansion of Prabog was mainly derived towards its I.M.C. It also allowed good luxuries to be made for the people, something that ended when the nuclear bombs hit and the inevitable looting and raiding of these facilities followed after. [s]Computer making was also part of the industry while considered heavy it also could be considered technological that was due to the rising tech industry in the planet on the pass this proved good in the making of domestic products and supplying itself to others now that majority of industry is in ruins and many people wish more for food it is not seen much as priority but still some factories remain[/s] :confused The manufacturing and design of AI´s remained mainly for domestic services, however some advanced AI were made especially for both military and consumer use. The existence of advanced AI gives some moral thoughts on a perception of right and wrong. [s]they shall have many were made before :rolleyes[/s] Many were made before the fall of the planet, however after the first bombs hit the AI assets were moved off-planet. This left a great emptiness in the bodies of robots and machines scattered throughout the ruins, forcing what little technology was left to be re-fitted and causing AI's to be of great value to the Republic. [quote=@DX3214][list][*][color=00a651]Sons of Alexander[/color] - The army being forged by a great man would be a understatement the armies of the republic of Prabog are very war experienced due to the past of the republic made much better by the hands of Alexander the man who made the republic the people also hold a high resilience mainly due to the conflicts that the planet itself endured. [*][color=00a651]Technological and Industrial Potential[/color] - While Prabog was devastated many ruins can be restored and the former glory of the planet put again ontop making Prabog while week hold a great potential to be a giant of economy once again like in times past but for now the world lies in ruins [*][color=00a651]A dream larger than us[/color] - Even though the republic was brought up from ruins its ideals of freedom equality for all of mankind as spoken by Alexander still sing across the planet something that now came to symbolise what they wish to move beyond not to just end chaos in this world but end it in the stars where mankind as well might be oppressed as a solene duty to spread liberty and unite mankind under a flag that will bring prosperity to all. [/list] [center][u][color=9e0b0f]Weaknesses[/color][/u][/center] [list][*][color=9e0b0f]Devastated world[/color] - a limited Nuclear exchange and ten years of warlords and war can do a number at infrastructure and economy therefore more than 60% of the planet is in ruins leaving zones of radiation in several areas that still need to be cleared up Devastation level is currently high [*][color=9e0b0f]Rather inefficient economy[/color] - Due to the collapsed economy of the planet something showed by how bartering it is still a main form of use by the people thanks in part to the nations coin being virtually useless in the field of economics is in desperate need of reforms. The coin of the nation is mainly useless at the moment thanks in part to an initial mass printing and making of then in an attempt to aid in the stabilization through the creation of a universal coin instead it became useless. A lack of reforms or an address of said issue can lead to severe consequences and possibly a dark age for many. [*][color=9e0b0f]Divided Government[/color] - While united in communalities and ideals many of the leaders still need to grasp unity and work together especially since the parties were forged by different ideas some by artists who lived isolated from the conflict, others by scientists who survived the chaos, some by politicians from the few regions who didn't faced too much warlord damage, others by nationalists who gained a renewed sense of nationalism under mankind and some by the Order who were the original party of Alexander while conservative in name they literally aim to maintain peace and order As of right now politics are partially divisive [/list][/quote] Strengths Sons of Alexander - The army is emboldened by the prowess and tact displayed by their intrepid leader Alexander, and his experience and motivation inspiration still resonates through soldiers today. The techniques, ideas, and philosophies that were held by their leader has created an inexplicable resilience which gives extreme confidence and a solid foundation which to fight and die on unthinkingly, and they have had plenty of experience to practice these teachings through recent conflicts. Technological and Industrial Potential - While Prabog was devastated many ruins can be restored and the former glory of the planet. While in its current state it is weak, it holds a great potential to be a giant of economy once again like in times past. A Dream Larger Than Ourselves - Even though the Republic was brought up from ruins its ideals of freedom and equality for all of mankind, as spoken by Alexander, still resonates across the planet as something that symbolizes what they wish to be. The restoration of order for their planet is just a stepping stone on the journey far beyond Pragor. The Republic sets eyes to the stars where mankind might be oppressed and ripe for the Republic to provide liberty and unite mankind under a flag that will bring prosperity to all. Weaknesses Devastated World - A limited nuclear exchange and ten years of warlords and combat has done a number at infrastructure and economy. It can be suggested that more than two-thirds of the planet is in ruins leaving zones of radiation in several areas that still need to be cleared up. Devastation level is currently high Rather Inefficient Economy - Due to the collapsed economy of the planet something showed by how bartering it is still a main form of use by the people thanks in part to the nations coin being virtually useless. If the Republic wishes to convince its people that their currency has value, they will need to reform it entirely and completely re-brand their capital system, because as it stands the barter system remains the primary method of trade among their people. The coin of the nation is useless thanks in part to an initial mass printing in an attempt to aid in the stabilization. Their creation of a universal coin was a solution which ended up failing miserably, being used for a variety of purposes such as a means to spark fires or line the bottom of animal pens. A lack of reforms or an address of said issue will without a doubt lead to severe consequences and possibly a dark age for many as resources thin and the last valuables families have are traded away for sustenance and bare necessities. Divided Government - While united in community and ideals, many of the leaders still struggle to grasp unity and work together. The parties were forged by a wide variety of groups; some by artists who lived isolated from the conflict, others by scientists who survived the chaos, some by politicians from the few regions who have not faced too much warlord damage, others by nationalists who gained a renewed sense of nationalism under mankind, and some by the Order who were the original party of Alexander. The latter which does its best to hold all together from falling apart, but require the aid and cooperation of all to fulfill its true potential. [quote=@DX3214]Administration The Government of Prabog The Republic itself and its administration is ruled as of the moment the congress and senate who legislate debate and others with the judicial maintaining the rule of the constitution the government is led by a five party system the leadership of the whole republic befalls the president of the republic a system of government that only works based on coalition governments of two or more parties to form a majority. The current parties of the nation The Social Humanist who wish that the well being of the people are put at first and that society should work together in a common good The Modernists who wish the modernisation and reconstruction of the worlds at hand but also a more liberal style of politics in economics and social norms the Justice and development party made out by the order and the politicians forming a coalition party due to equaliser systems in reality they are divided between a right and left divide with some favoring more conservative policies while the other side favors more progressive policies the only way it maintains united is through its duarky of two leaders The National party who preaches a strengthening of institutions and the fast reconstruction and expansion of the borders [/quote] The Government of Prabog The Republic and its administration is ruled by the Congress and the Senate who legislate and debate with the judicial maintenance of the constitution. It is lead by a five party system under the leadership of the President of the Republic, however it is heavily reliant on the coalition governments of two or more parties to form a majority to make big decisions. The current parties of the nation are: [u]The Social Humanist[/u] who wish that the wellbeing of the people are put at first and that society should work together for a common good. [u]The Modernists[/u] who wish the modernization and reconstruction of the world at hand, but also adopt a more liberal style of politics in economics and social norms [u]The Justice and Development Party[/u] is made out by the Order and the politicians forming a coalition party due to equalizer systems. In reality they are divided between a right and left with some favoring more conservative policies, while the other side favors more progressive policies. The only way it maintains united is through its diarchy of two leaders [u]The National Party[/u] who preaches a strengthening of institutions and the fast reconstruction and expansion of the borders [b](thats four parties, not five unless I'm missing something!:hehe) I hope this was helpful and not too mean, I mean I re-wrote a shit ton of your sheet so that is pretty nice, so maybe it balances itself out. Its ultimately up to you to implement my edits, since its your nation and if you wish to edit it/not use what I wrote, that's totally fine! You know more English than I know Portuguese (i dont know any) and I'm actually really proud of you bro. But yeah, super cool thread going on here, I'm excited to see what you guys come up with next! Cheers![/b][/hider]