[@Vermicelli] (forgot to tag, so this edit ping will probably fail, but for whenever you come back)

[quote]In the homeland, a strict two-child policy imposes limits on the average household.[/quote]
Just clarify that to be either some pocket of China/China prior to the the Third Calamity if the experiment’s been going for a while.

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[quote]Savyna's Starweaver ability differs greatly from what her mal'akh blood would suggest. She possesses the ability to call forth her life energy or energy she has stored into manifested weaponry, taking on the forms of blades or projectile attacks. As an additional effect against living targets, attacks from this power will sever their connections to the mortal plane, debilitating their magical properties and eventually leaving them as soulless husks.

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Overuse of this ability can cause the power to reach a state of complete instability, overtaking Savyna's body and turning her into a feral being.[/quote]
[i] Starweaver ability differs greatly from what her mal'akh blood would suggest:[/i] Starweaver abilities have nothing to do with racial magic; please adjust.

[i]...blades or projectile attacks:[/i] this is fine. 

[i]...severing connections to mortal plane:[/i] ambiguous, probably not fine. Clarify further. 

[i]...debilitating magical properties:[/i] 
[indent][indent]ambiguous, if the phrase means turning off someone’s power, that’s not fine—I don’t want players with that ability. If you mean a general debuff like weakening the effects of someone’s power, that may be fine depending on how you rephrase it. 

Any ability that directly and negatively affects other players’ control of their powers (as opposed to just general debuffs/status), I will be very harsh on. I don’t anticipate creating a lot of GM-led PvP scenarios, but it’s necessary to be conscious of what players may want to do within reason. It might be easier to just nix this whole part and stick to magic projectiles or rework it as a sort of small-scale, area effect general speed/strength/movement debuff where her projectiles land.[/indent][/indent]
[i]...overtaking Savyna's body and turning her into a feral being:[/i] 
[indent][indent]What is the intended effect? If she becomes a stronger monster/being on overuse, regardless of IC control, it’s transformation or a sort of uncontrollable berserker state + magic projectiles. If that’s the intent, then not approved.

If her power turns off on overuse and she also loses her sanity for a bit, then that’s acceptable, but you would then need to rewrite the section in her history regarding her lab outburst.[/indent][/indent]

Additionally, please clarify in the powers section exactly what racial abilities she has, if any, given her status as a non-standard, half-Mal’Akh clone. Her lack of general Mal’Akh features and mellifluous voice has been noted, I’m just curious if she’s entirely lacking all their abilities and is also unable to utilize normal human magic.